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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. v. 3
It is argued that more funds should be allocated to roads and motorways rather than to public transport systems. Personally, I find myself in a complete disagreement with this opinion. On the one hand, I can understand why spending money on road networks gains the support of many people. Their view is that better road quality would increase the levels of safety and ease traffic congestion. Firstly, the better quality of motorways means a considerable decline in road mortality and injury rates. This is justifiable since the roads in some countries are fraught with holes and obstacles, plaguing people with danger and insecurity. In this sense, the amelioration of poor road infrastructures would ensure the safety of travellers. Secondly, expanding roads and building more motorways are believed to curb traffic jams. Traffic congestion is major concern in big cities where massive numbers of vehicles travel on the road during hours of peak demand. This vexed problem could be tackled as wider roads provide maximum travel time in free-flowing traffic. However, I would argue that spending on public transport is a better investment for a number of reasons. Compared to vehicles, high-capacity public transit modes can accommodate a larger number of passengers at a time. This could be exemplified by integrated and expansive public transport networks in Australia. Recent estimates indicate that each train on Sydney’s railways removes approximately 1000 cars from its roads. Therefore, a modal shift from private to public transport would tremendously alleviate urban congestion which has been considered as one of the productivity bottlenecks in developed economies. Moreover, efficient public transport systems are a contributor to a cleaner environment. By removing cars from streets, public transit plays a pivotal role in the abatement of carbon emissions. Not only does this reduce air pollution, but it also mitigates the effects of climate change as a whole. Based on the above-mentioned arguments, I acquiesce in the view that money should be invested in public transport systems rather than road networks.
It
is argued
that more funds should
be allocated
to
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roads
and motorways
rather
than to
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public
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transport
systems.
Personally
, I find myself in a complete disagreement with this opinion.

On the one hand, I can understand why spending money on
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road
networks gains the support of
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many
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people
. Their view is that better
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road
quality would increase the levels of safety and
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ease
traffic congestion.
Firstly
, the better quality of motorways means a considerable decline in
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road
mortality and injury rates. This is justifiable since the
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roads
in
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some
countries are fraught with holes and obstacles, plaguing
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people
with
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danger
and insecurity. In this sense, the amelioration of poor
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road
infrastructures would ensure the safety of
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travellers
.
Secondly
, expanding
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roads
and building more motorways
are believed
to curb traffic jams. Traffic congestion is major concern in
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big
cities where massive numbers of vehicles travel on the
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road
during hours of peak demand. This vexed problem could
be tackled
as wider
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roads
provide maximum travel time in free-flowing traffic.

However
, I would argue that spending on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
is a better investment for a number of reasons. Compared to vehicles, high-capacity
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transit modes can accommodate a larger number of passengers at a time. This could
be exemplified
by integrated and expansive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
networks in Australia. Recent estimates indicate that each train on Sydney’s railways removes approximately 1000 cars from its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
.
Therefore
, a modal shift from private to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
would
tremendously
alleviate urban congestion which has
been considered
as one of the productivity bottlenecks in developed economies.
Moreover
, efficient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
systems are a contributor to a cleaner environment. By removing cars from streets,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transit plays a pivotal role in the abatement of carbon emissions. Not
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only
does this
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reduce
air pollution,
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but
it
also
mitigates the effects of climate
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change
as a whole.

Based on the above-mentioned arguments, I acquiesce in the view that money should
be invested
in
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public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transport
systems
rather
than
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road
networks.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
6.0
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