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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree? v.1

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. v. 1
It is argued that money should be spent on developing roads and motorways rather than on public transport systems. Personally, I think both thoroughfare and public transportation systems have vital roles to play in modern society, and therefore should be equally invested in. On the one hand, better roadway quality increases the level of safety and reduces traffic congestion. In many cities and provinces in Vietnam, for example, the number of subway accidents has been ever-increasing because there are a lot of holes on the trail’s surface. This is a clear evidence that the government should spend money improving the quality of boulevard systems in order to ensure the safety of people. Additionally, building wider roads and more motorways in big cities like Ha Chi Minh, where traffic congestion is still a major problem, will help to increase thoroughfare capacity. It means that there will be more space for a larger number of vehicles, hence reducing pressure on the city’s main roads as well as congestion. On the other hand, better public transport systems are beneficial for the environment and people who do not have a private vehicle. In fact, some modes of public transport like subways produce less pollutants than cars and other private vehicles. Therefore, spending money providing people with access to public transport will improve air quality and reduce pollution. Furthermore, for those who do not have a private vehicle, such as motorbike or car, buses and subways are a great choice if they have to travel every day. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirmed the position that, money should be well-spent on not only the road but also public transport systems.
It
is argued
that
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money
should
be spent
on developing
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roads
and motorways
rather
than on
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public
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transport
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systems
.
Personally
, I
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think
both thoroughfare and
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public
transportation
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systems
have vital roles to play in modern society, and
therefore
should be
equally
invested in.

On the one hand, better roadway quality increases the level of safety and
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reduces
traffic congestion. In
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many
cities and provinces in Vietnam,
for example
, the number of subway accidents has been ever-increasing
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because
there are
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a lot of
holes on the trail’s surface. This is a
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clear
evidence that the
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government
should spend
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money
improving the quality of boulevard
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systems
in order to ensure the safety of
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people
.
Additionally
, building wider
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roads
and more motorways in
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big
cities like Ha Chi
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Minh
, where traffic congestion is
still
a major problem, will
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help
to increase thoroughfare capacity. It means that there will be more space for a larger number of
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vehicles
,
hence
reducing pressure on the city’s main
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roads
as well
as congestion.

On the other hand
, better
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public
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transport
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systems
are beneficial for the environment and
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people
who do not have a private
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vehicle
. In fact,
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some
modes of
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public
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transport
like subways produce
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less
pollutants than cars and other private
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vehicles
.
Therefore
, spending
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money
providing
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people
with access to
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public
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transport
will
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improve
air quality and
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reduce
pollution.
Furthermore
, for those who do not have a private
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vehicle
, such as motorbike or car, buses and subways are a great choice if they
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have to
travel every day.

By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirmed the position that,
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money
should be well-spent on not
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only
the
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road
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but
also
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public
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transport
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systems
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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