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Fossil fuels are the main sources of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. DO you think this is a positive or negative development? v.1

Fossil fuels are the main sources of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. DO you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 1
Into this expeditiously transforming world, the use of fossil fuels has attracted a lot of voices. Today, people are encouraged to use the renewable sources of energy like wind, water and so on and I contemplate this change to be a positive one. To embark on the side, which supports the use of alternative sources, I believe that the excessive consumption of non-renewable sources like coal, petrol and others has led to its depletion and as a result, these resources now cost an arm and a leg. Moreover, pollution is a prevalent problem harming the ecological balance and the healthy lifestyle. For instance, Delhi, the capital city of India, experiences egregious air quality due to the burgeoning number of petrol vehicles and industries, making the citizen stifle. Accentuating the compelling outlook, which reckons the use of alternate energy sources as a pessimistic mentality shift, some savants propound that in the contemporary era, we are not developed enough to incorporate this change. Still a lot of technical advancements are required for this idea working in the top-notch state. To illustrate this further, various small and remote villages in India live without electricity and are highly dependent on energy sources like coal for their daily need, hence it will be a tremendously laborious task to implement such a transformation. Apart from this, the set-up cost for a working model is extremely exorbitant, which acts as a pertinent problem. To summarise, I would say that moving towards the renewable sources of energy is the need of the hour. It might take us some time to reach the level of such an elevated technical advancement, but considering he ceaseless dip in the environmental conditions, it is salient that such steps are taken immediately.
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sources
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energy
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on and I contemplate this
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change
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positive
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use
of alternative
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sources
, I believe that the excessive consumption of non-renewable
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sources
like coal, petrol
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and others
has led to its depletion and
as a result
, these resources
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now
cost an arm and a leg.
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, pollution is a prevalent problem harming the ecological balance and the healthy lifestyle.
For instance
, Delhi, the capital city of India, experiences egregious air quality due to the burgeoning number of petrol vehicles and industries, making the citizen stifle.

Accentuating the compelling outlook, which reckons the
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use
of alternate
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energy
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sources
as a pessimistic mentality shift,
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some
savants propound that in the contemporary era, we are not developed
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enough
to incorporate this
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change
.
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a lot of
technical advancements
are required
for this
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idea
working in the top-notch state. To illustrate this
further
, various
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small
and remote villages in India
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live
without electricity and are
highly
dependent on
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energy
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sources
like coal for their daily need,
hence
it will be a
tremendously
laborious task to implement such a transformation. Apart from this, the set-up cost for a working model is
extremely
exorbitant, which acts as a pertinent problem.

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summarise
, I would say that moving towards the renewable
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sources
of
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energy
is the need of the hour. It might take us
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some
time to reach the level of such an elevated technical advancement,
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but
considering
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ceaseless dip in the environmental conditions, it is salient that such steps
are taken
immediately.
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels are the main sources of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. DO you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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