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Some people think if students are afraid of the teacher it is better. Others say that having a friendly relationship between the teachers and students is better. What do you think? Which one do you support? v.1

Some people think if students are afraid of the teacher it is better. Others say that having a friendly relationship between the teachers and students is better. What do you think? Which one do you support? v. 1
Teachers play a vital role in mentoring students and the skills acquired by them during their academic tenure reveals their hard work. One school of thought believes that teachers should be very strict in the classroom while others believe that amiable nature of instructors yields better results. I believe that combination of both models could potentially produce favourable results; these two models will be analysed in the essay. Proponents of hard teaching style believe that if the student feels petrified from their instructor, they will become more disciplined and organised. A strict behaviour of teachers helps in maintaining classroom ethics. For instance, I was usually weak in mathematics in my bachelor's program, it was the stringent nature of the instructor that kept me terrified and I worked hard to achieve decent grades. Teachers who develop the image of strict pedagogues tent to control the classroom environment more effectively. Moreover, students submit their assignment on time, remain punctual, respect their instructor and do not create a mess in the classroom. On the contrary, harsh attitude of a teacher kills the creative skills of a student. Amiable nature improves collaboration between the two. Students afraid of their teacher tend to avoid asking questions, and they might struggle in absorbing the lecture which will impact their academic grades. For instance, students generally prefer frank and polite instructors in their project work, because they believe that they can discuss problems with them in greater detail than with strict and arrogant teachers. Moreover, friendly attitude of instructor helps students in sharing their view and discussing their problems. To recapitulate, the aforementioned provide plausible arguments in favour of both views. However, in my opinion, instructor and student bond should be a blend of both models as it will not only help in maintaining the required discipline but will also improve collaboration in the class.
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play a vital role in mentoring
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students
and the
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skills
acquired by them during their academic tenure reveals their
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hard
work. One school of
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thought
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believes
that
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teachers
should be
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very
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strict
in the classroom while others
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believe
that amiable nature of
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instructors
yields better results. I
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believe
that combination of both models could
potentially
produce
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favourable
results; these two models will be
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analysed
in the essay.

Proponents of
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hard
teaching style
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believe
that if the
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student
feels petrified from their
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instructor
, they will become more disciplined and
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organised
. A
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strict
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behaviour
of
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teachers
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helps
in maintaining classroom ethics.
For instance
, I was
usually
weak in mathematics in my bachelor's program, it was the stringent nature of the
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instructor
that
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kept
me terrified and I worked
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hard
to achieve decent grades.
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Teachers
who develop the image of
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strict
pedagogues tent to control the classroom environment more
effectively
.
Moreover
,
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students
submit their assignment on time, remain punctual, respect their
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instructor
and do not create a mess in the classroom.

On the contrary
, harsh attitude of a
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teacher
kills the creative
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skills
of a
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student
. Amiable nature
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improves
collaboration between the two.
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Students
afraid of their
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teacher
tend to avoid asking questions, and they might struggle in absorbing the lecture which will impact their academic grades.
For instance
,
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students
generally
prefer frank and polite
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instructors
in their project work,
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because
they
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believe
that they can discuss problems with them in greater detail than with
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strict
and arrogant
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teachers
.
Moreover
, friendly attitude of
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instructor
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helps
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students
in sharing their view and discussing their problems.

To recapitulate, the aforementioned provide plausible arguments in
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favour
of both views.
However
, in my opinion,
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instructor
and
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student
bond should be a blend of both models as it will not
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only
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help
in maintaining the required discipline
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but
will
also
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improve
collaboration in the
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class
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think if students are afraid of the teacher it is better. Others say that having a friendly relationship between the teachers and students is better. What do you think? Which one do you support? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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