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Some languages die every year and English is becoming used more and more as a world language. Many people feel this is a positive trend and that the world with fewer languages promotes harmony and understanding between people. Analyse both sides of this argument and provide your opinion. v.1

Some languages die every year and English is becoming used more and more as a world language. Many people feel this is a positive trend and that the world with fewer languages promotes harmony and understanding between people. Analyse both sides of this argument and provide your opinion. v. 1
In the contemporary world, peoples' lives are progressed pursuant to the changes that globalisation brings to the society. Popular western cultures have altered the overall linguistic practice around the globe, establishing English as a dominant language while leaving other minor languages in threat. Some argue that such a trend can allow global citizens to achieve harmony through destructing a communicational barrier while others state the opposite opinion. These two divergent ideas will be analysed in the following paragraphs, supported by relevant examples. Having English as a common language can ease possible difficulties arisen by language barriers. One can readily recount incidences of people having conversational problems when travelling overseas. Not being able to understand foreign languages disable people from comprehending foreigners' thoughts and bonding with them. Consequentially, this may cause some to develop biased or negative perceptions of people from other countries. Therefore, if the citizens of the world could speak one or fewer languages, troubles generated by language barriers would be minimised and create a harmonious society. However, the disappearance of a language may result in a loss of a nation's cultural identity. Languages do not only represent verbal practice by humans but also reflect on a country's traditions. For example, the Korean language includes two different ways of expressing words depending on which age group one belongs to. If such as a linguistically diversified activity was to be replaced by English, the nation would lose its historical custom that had been maintained for centuries. In conclusion, the aforementioned ideas suggest two varying opinions about having fewer languages in the world. I personally believe that every language should be preserved to keep its individual identity and characteristics.
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lives
are progressed
pursuant to the
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changes
that
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globalisation
brings to the society. Popular western cultures have altered the
overall
linguistic practice around the globe, establishing English as a dominant
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language
while leaving other minor
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languages
in threat.
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Some
argue that such a trend can
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allow
global citizens to achieve harmony through destructing a
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communicational
barrier while others state the opposite opinion. These two divergent
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ideas
will be
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analysed
in the following paragraphs, supported by relevant examples.

Having English as a common
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language
can
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ease
possible difficulties arisen by
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language
barriers. One can
readily
recount incidences of
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people
having conversational problems when travelling overseas. Not being able to understand foreign
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languages
disable
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people
from comprehending foreigners' thoughts and bonding with them.
Consequentially
, this may cause
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some
to develop biased or
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negative
perceptions of
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people
from other countries.
Therefore
, if the citizens of the world could speak one or fewer
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languages
, troubles generated by
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language
barriers would be
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minimised
and create a harmonious society.

However
, the disappearance of a
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language
may result in a loss of a nation's cultural identity.
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Languages
do not
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only
represent verbal practice by humans
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but
also
reflect on a country's traditions.
For example
, the Korean
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language
includes two
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different
ways of expressing words depending on which age group one belongs to. If such as a
linguistically
diversified activity was to
be replaced
by English, the nation would lose its historical custom that had
been maintained
for centuries.

In conclusion
, the aforementioned
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ideas
suggest two varying opinions about having fewer
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languages
in the world. I
personally
believe that every
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language
should
be preserved
to
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keep
its individual identity and characteristics.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some languages die every year and English is becoming used more and more as a world language. Many people feel this is a positive trend and that the world with fewer languages promotes harmony and understanding between people. Analyse both sides of this argument and provide your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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