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Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Discuss both the viewpoints and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. v. 1
Undoubtedly, history is indispensable part of life. Some people consider that learning history is totally waste of time; however, others opine that history teaches many important things in life which is related to the current era. In this essay, I will discuss both the given statements before reaching to the final verdict. On the one hand, the opponents believe that information about history is not acquire because the events in the past does not have much importance in the present time. In other words, there are numerous dates and events had been taken placed in the past which are not required for day to day. Apart for this, it is difficult to memorize all the historical events that are not longer as equivalent as technology and science. A recent research has been conducted by the Department of History in Harvard University reveals that more than 67% of students opt subjects namely science and technology. The specific reason for this is history content huge date, which is not essential for daily basis. Hence, gaining knowledge about history is mundane task for the people. One the other hand, the supporters who supports history for two reasons. First and foremost reason of inculcating information about culture and tradition from the past. This is because, if the individuals learn more about their customes and tradition values for history, they will able to teach their upcoming generation. To take as an example of India, the celebration of diwali festival remains as same as it had been the past by lighting up lamps in House. A consequence of this people stay connected with their origins. Secondly, to gain adequate knowledge about the past inventions and innovatives. Since the ancient inventions teache new strategies and techniques to the people, that can be implement in new models for advancement. For instance, in the past bulbs were consumed only electricity, whereas now the same bulbs run on solar energy. The result of this the products are fabricated in different ways as per requirement. Thus, history helps in obtaining information about cultures and at the same time it also provides knowledge about technology. In conclusion, it has been a debatable issue whether history has its significance in human's life or not. Dispite of this, from my perspective, history is essential part, not only it gives wide range of information about the once traditions and customs, but also data about old technology which can be modify with help of new technologies for the betterment of mankind.
Undoubtedly
,
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history
is indispensable part of life.
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Some
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people
consider that learning
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history
is
totally
waste of time;
however
, others opine that
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history
teaches
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many
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important
things in life which
is related
to the
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current
era. In this essay, I will discuss both the
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given
statements
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before
reaching to the final verdict.

On the one hand, the opponents believe that
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information
about
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history
is not
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acquire
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because
the
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events
in the
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past
does not have much importance in the present time.
In other words
, there are numerous dates and
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events
had
been taken
placed in the
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past
which are not required for day to day. Apart for this, it is difficult to memorize all the historical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
that are not longer as equivalent as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
and science. A recent research has
been conducted
by the Department of
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History
in Harvard University reveals that more than 67% of students opt subjects
namely
science and
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technology
. The specific reason for this is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
content huge date, which is not essential for daily basis.
Hence
, gaining knowledge about
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history
is mundane task for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the other hand, the supporters who
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supports
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history
for two reasons.
First
and foremost reason of inculcating
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information
about culture and tradition from the
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past
. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
, if the individuals learn more about their
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "customs", the plural form of the noun 'custom'?
customes
and tradition values for
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history
, they
Did you mean "will be able"?
will able
to teach their upcoming generation. To take as an example of India, the celebration of
Possible spelling mistake found.
diwali
festival remains as same as it had been the
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past
by lighting up lamps in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
House
. A consequence of this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
stay connected with their origins.
Secondly
, to gain adequate knowledge about the
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past
inventions and
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innovatives
. Since the ancient inventions
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teache
new strategies and techniques to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, that can be implement in new models for advancement.
For instance
, in the
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past
bulbs
were consumed
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only
electricity, whereas
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now
the same bulbs run on solar energy. The result of this the products
are fabricated
in
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different
ways as per requirement.
Thus
,
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history
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in obtaining
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information
about cultures and at the same time it
also
provides knowledge about technology.

In conclusion
, it has been a debatable issue whether
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history
has its significance in human's life or not.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Dispite
of this, from my perspective,
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history
is essential part, not
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only
it gives wide range of
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information
about the once traditions and customs,
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but
also
data about
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old
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technology
which can be
Consider using the past participle "modified"?
modify
with
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help
of new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technologies
for the betterment of mankind.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
415 words
6
Overall Band Score
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