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Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Write on both views and give your opinion, citing examples from your experience v.2

Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Write on both views and give your opinion, citing examples from your experience v. 2
Study of ancient subject aids in attaining knowledge about our ancestors. Some people think that it is a useless information to acquire, whereas, others believe that our past has so much to give to the modern era. This essay will provide views and my relevant opinion with examples. Most part of the academic education is baseless without the better understanding of the historical events. There is a plethora of topics which are inextricably linked to our past. In my view, history has set examples for the young adults in motivating them. For instance, legends like aunty has successfully inspired me and the youth of our country without being physically present with their parents and determination as a result relentless effort of people in our past formed a foundation in our society. A bright present could be created only by the current generation and the past is a mere glimpse. It is believed that a person's zeal and dedication can lead him to his success. Therefore, Procurement of data about the old days chip in nothing important in the development of the nation, because our future is only science. I feel humankind is relatively more civilised and technologically advanced nowadays, which has no connection with the lifestyle of the people who lived long ago. Like, habitat and eating habits are considered barbaric of mankind who lived decades ago and has left no scope for our youth to learn something from them. To sum up, the work of the most of the people are certainly respected and provoked several adults today, but the time has changed now, this era is heading towards a completely different direction which is independent and science-oriented.
Study of ancient subject aids in attaining knowledge about our ancestors.
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Some
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people
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think
that it is
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a useless information
to acquire, whereas, others believe that our
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past
has
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so
much to give to the modern era. This essay will provide views and my relevant opinion with examples.

Most part of the academic education is baseless without the better understanding of the historical
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events
. There is a plethora of topics which are
inextricably
linked to our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
. In my view, history has set examples for the young adults in motivating them.
For instance
, legends like aunty has
successfully
inspired me and the youth of our country without being
physically
present with their parents and determination
as a result
relentless effort of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
formed a foundation in our society.

A bright present could
be created
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only
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
generation and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
is a mere glimpse. It
is believed
that a person's zeal and dedication can lead him to his success.
Therefore
, Procurement of data about the
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old
days chip in nothing
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important
in the development of the nation,
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because
our future is
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only
science. I feel humankind is
relatively
more
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civilised
and
technologically
advanced nowadays, which has no connection with the lifestyle of the
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people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
long ago. Like, habitat and eating habits
are considered
barbaric of mankind who
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lived
decades ago and has
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left
no scope for our youth to learn something from them.

To sum up, the work of the most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are
certainly
respected and provoked several adults
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today
,
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but
the time has
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changed
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now
, this era is heading towards a completely
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different
direction which is independent and science-oriented.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Write on both views and give your opinion, citing examples from your experience v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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