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Some people think government should subsidies food and vegetables to make healthy food cheaper. Other argues that tax should be set on unhealthy food. Discuss both views and gives your opinion. v.1

Some people think government should subsidies food and vegetables to make healthy food cheaper. Other argues that tax should be set on unhealthy food. v. 1
Nutritional value of foods is an important thing to be considered before purchasing food items. Therefore, some individuals have an opinion that the government should lower the prices of healthy foodstuffs to promote a thriving lifestyle, while there are others who think that taxes should be imposed on junk foods to reduce their consumption. In this essay, I will discuss both the views and give my opinion in the end. Healthy diets play a vital role in maintaining fitness as well as boosting our immunity. Most of the people, especially working class, prefers to have fast foods as they are tastier and cooks in lesser time. In spite of knowing the negative consequences of these foods, they take them regularly as they do not have any other choice but to have them due to their tight schedules. Moreover, natural meals such as fruits and vegetables are expensive as compared to ready made eateries due to which destitute people cannot afford them. Consequently, alleviating the costs of healthy foods will make these eatables affordable for all sections of the society. On the other hand, government can impose taxes on junk foods so that lesser people would buy them. First of all, young children like to eat burgers and pizzas more than adults. Thus, when prices will become higher and their parents would not give extra money to them, it will definitely check their unhealthy eating habits. Another thing is that if the costs of these meals become elevated, then the individuals would have no choice and they have to shift towards nutritious eatables. As a result, market of junk foods will get affected which will eventually impact their production too. To conclude, I would say that instead of imposing taxes on unhealthy diets, authorities should subsidize the costs of healthy eating stuffs so that people can easily buy them and get benefit out of it. In my opinion, elevating the prices of foodstuffs will do nothing more than but just affecting the budget of common public as a richer class will never need to care about the expenses.
Nutritional value of
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foods
is an
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important
thing to
be considered
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before
purchasing
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food
items.
Therefore
,
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some
individuals have an opinion that the
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government
should lower the prices of healthy foodstuffs to promote a thriving lifestyle, while there are others who
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think
that taxes should
be imposed
on junk
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foods
to
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reduce
their consumption. In this essay, I will discuss both the views and give my opinion in the
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end
.

Healthy diets play a vital role in maintaining fitness
as well
as boosting our immunity. Most of the
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people
,
especially
working
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class
, prefers to have
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fast
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foods
as they are tastier and cooks in lesser time.
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In spite of
knowing the
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negative
consequences of these
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foods
, they take them
regularly
as they do not have any other choice
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but
to have them due to their tight schedules.
Moreover
, natural meals such as fruits and vegetables are expensive as compared to
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ready made
eateries due to which destitute
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people
cannot afford them.
Consequently
, alleviating the costs of healthy
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foods
will
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make
these eatables affordable for all sections of the society.

On the other hand
,
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government
can impose taxes on junk
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foods
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so
that lesser
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people
would
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buy
them.
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First of all
, young children like to eat burgers and pizzas more than adults.
Thus
, when prices will become higher and their parents would not give extra money to them, it will definitely
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check
their unhealthy eating habits. Another thing is that if the costs of these meals become elevated, then the individuals would have no
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choice and
they
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have to
shift towards nutritious eatables.
As a result
, market of junk
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foods
will
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get
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affected
which will
eventually
impact their production too.

To conclude
, I would say that
instead
of imposing taxes on unhealthy diets, authorities should subsidize the costs of healthy eating stuffs
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so
that
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people
can
easily
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buy
them and
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get
benefit out of it. In my opinion, elevating the prices of foodstuffs will do nothing more than
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but
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just
affecting the budget of common public as a richer
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class
will never need to care about the expenses.
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IELTS essay Some people think government should subsidies food and vegetables to make healthy food cheaper. Other argues that tax should be set on unhealthy food. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
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