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some people say government should subsidised the fruits and vegetables to make healthy food cheaper. Some other say it should be tax to unhealthy food. v.1

some people say government should subsidised the fruits and vegetables to make healthy food cheaper. Some other say it should be tax to unhealthy food. v. 1
It seems consensus nowadays that it is highly privileged to provide healthy food to the citizens by the food authorities but some people presume that to impose heavy tax on junk food because it would certainly enhance the preference of consumers toward consuming healthy food. In this essay, i would intend to enunciate this idea in the upcoming paragraphs. Admittedly, the potential methods of enhancing the consumption rate of nutritious food by individuals, are manifold but fro the stand point of some experts, the significant way is to levy taxes on unhealthy food is the best. It certainly inhibit the interest of the people to spend money on such kinds of food. As a result, numerous people prefer to buy the food, which would be healthy. For instance, in China, government increased the price of junk food and provided the meal, which was full of nutrients to the citizens in the year 2000. As a consequence, people were more likely to purchase healthy food. Alternatively, government ought to make an effort to inculcate awareness among people to choose healthy food for consumption by providing it at cheap rate. Since, most of the people detest to purchase unhealthy food due to the high prices of nutritious. If authorities provide such kind of food to the individuals at the subsidize rate then it would surely appeals the consumers to take food, which is full of nutrients. In final words, needless to say that to consume healthy food by the people is good for health and the can secure them from multiple health issues by consuming it. To put heavy taxes on the junk food by the government is also not a bad idea to enforce the individuals for taking nutritious meal.
It seems consensus nowadays that it is
highly
privileged to provide
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healthy
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food
to the citizens by the
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food
authorities
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but
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some
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people
presume that to impose heavy tax on junk
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food
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because
it would
certainly
enhance the preference of consumers toward consuming
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healthy
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food
. In this essay,
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i
would intend to enunciate this
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idea
in the upcoming paragraphs.

Admittedly
, the potential methods of enhancing the consumption rate of nutritious
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food
by individuals, are manifold
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but
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fro
the stand point of
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some
experts, the significant way is to levy taxes on unhealthy
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food
is the best. It
certainly
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inhibit
the interest of the
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people
to spend money on such kinds of
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food
.
As a result
, numerous
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people
prefer to
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buy
the
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food
, which would be
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healthy
.
For instance
, in China,
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government
increased the price of junk
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food
and provided the meal, which was full of nutrients to the citizens in the year 2000. As a consequence,
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people
were more likely to
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purchase
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healthy
food.

Alternatively
,
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government
ought to
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make
an effort to inculcate awareness among
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people
to choose
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healthy
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food
for consumption by providing it at
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cheap
rate.
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Since
, most of the
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people
detest to
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purchase
unhealthy
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food
due to the high prices of nutritious. If authorities provide such kind of
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food
to the individuals at
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the subsidize
rate then it would
surely
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appeals
the consumers to take
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food
, which is full of nutrients.

In final words, needless to say that to consume
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healthy
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food
by the
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people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
is
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good
for health and the can secure them from multiple health issues by consuming it. To put heavy taxes on the junk
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food
by the
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government
is
also
not a
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bad
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idea
to enforce the individuals for taking nutritious meal.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay some people say government should subsidised the fruits and vegetables to make healthy food cheaper. Some other say it should be tax to unhealthy food. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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