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Some people think Climate Change has negative effects on businesses, others think it creates opportunities. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think Climate Change has negative effects on businesses, others think it creates opportunities. v. 1
Some people assert that businesses are adversely affected due to the changing climate, whilst others believe climate change provides opportunities. This essay discusses both sides of this argument, and then I will give my own perspective. To start with, people who believe climate change poses risks to businesses, think that changing climate results in extreme weather events, which potentially disrupt the supply chains of businesses. It is reported that, in Vietnam, long-term drought and capricious precipitation pattern cause a severe shortage of crop yield, thus, putting food-supply businesses at risk of resource depletion. Furthermore, climate change also damages the businesses’ infrastructures, making the cost of insurance rise. Recent research concluded that the US business spend approximately 70 million dollars on insurance due to the consequences of climate change Conversely, those who think climate change creates opportunities for businesses, believe that businesses can develop products that suit the changing of climate and sell it at profit. Since the weather pattern is becoming unpredictable people working in physical-labour industries such as farmer, face the risk of crop yield losses and this leads to increasing demand for new crop strains which can adapt to the changing weather. As a result, many agriculture companies take this as a lucrative potential and sell their products. Nonetheless, I think this is less likely as these businesses are also under the influence of climate change and if the weather change severely, these products would no longer be able to suit the climate. In conclusion, although some people concur that climate change benefits business, I believe that its negative impacts are significant as it disrupts the supply chains of business and its physical effects are disastrous
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provides opportunities. This essay discusses both sides of this argument, and then I will give my
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creates opportunities for
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can develop products that suit the
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and sell it at profit. Since the
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pattern is becoming unpredictable
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working in
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industries such as farmer, face the
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of crop yield losses and this leads to increasing demand for new crop strains which can adapt to the
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changing
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.
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take this as a lucrative potential and sell their products. Nonetheless, I
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this is less likely as these
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, these products would no longer be able to suit the climate.

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benefits
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impacts are significant as it disrupts the supply chains of
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and its physical effects are disastrous
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IELTS essay Some people think Climate Change has negative effects on businesses, others think it creates opportunities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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