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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. v. 4
Undoubtedly that these days the detainees in all over the world are becoming a great waste of the public treasury and so many countries around the planet are reviewing their policies on how to deal with the criminals? One of the options is the suggestion here and in this essay I am going to examine this theory financially and socially and conclude by giving my personal opinion Certainly a particular number of these prisoners and specially those with judicial misdemeanor and are convicted for a limit numbers of years lesser than 10 years might be utilized during their phase correctively in terms to teach them a new career, in this way you will make their prison time beneficial for them, consequentially they have a job after custody and hopefully it will push them out of street, but in the same time the society will get its debt during these years by forcing them working in return to their food and shuttle in the jail A second point is that socializing these peoples with the normal citizens will aide them to reintegrate in the society and hopefully becoming a good resident again But on the other hand, not all the prisoners are in the same category, those with a high crime like killing, raping. those must be isolate from the rest of the public and dealing with them extremely carefully As we have seen in this discussion the issue has a economically and socially evidence and might be applied but one a specific groups of these criminals
Undoubtedly
that these days the detainees in all over the world are becoming a great waste of the public treasury and
so
many
countries around the planet are reviewing their policies on how to deal with the criminals? One of the options is the suggestion here and in this essay I am going to examine this theory
financially
and
socially
and conclude by giving my personal
opinion


Certainly
a particular number of these prisoners and
specially
those with judicial misdemeanor and
are convicted
for a limit numbers of years lesser than 10 years might
be utilized
during their phase
correctively
in terms to teach them a new career, in this way you will
make
their prison time beneficial for them,
consequentially
they have a job after custody and
hopefully
it will push them out of street,
but
in the same time the society will
get
its debt during these years by forcing them working in return to their food and shuttle in the jail

A second point is that socializing these peoples with the normal citizens will aide them to reintegrate in the society and
hopefully
becoming a
good
resident again

But
on the other hand
, not all the prisoners are in the same category, those with a high crime like killing, raping.
those
must
be
isolate
from the rest of the public and dealing with them
extremely
carefully


As we have
seen
in this discussion the issue has
a
economically
and
socially
evidence and might
be applied
but
one a specific groups of these criminals
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
255 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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