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Some people think an international car free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways do to this. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think an international car free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways do to this. v. 2
When it comes to preserveing enviroment, there are divided opinions. Here few people raise voice that there should be complete car free days to reduce air pollution. However, others believe that, there are some several steps to maintain it. This essay will discuss both the sides and my perception in the ensuing paragraphs. On the one hand, there are several reasons why there is a common belief that a car free day can reduce air pollution. The first and the foremost one is, there will be high usage of public transportation. To explain this, if people will not allow to commute by car for one day, they will use other means of transportation such as walking, bus, train and many more. By this, they will get to that there are many convenient facilities available to reach desired destination. As a result, there will be less usage of private vehicle and due to this, less number of air pollution will generate. For example, in Delhi, government has started law of odd-even cars in order to reduce air pollution. On the other hand, there are many measures that can be taken, instead of car free day. Initially, authorities should impose higher luxury taxes on cars. To be more clear, nowadays, cars are easily available in the market in affordable price. Because of this, many human beings buy it and use it on regular basis. So, by applying heavy taxes fewer individuals will afford cars and conseqyently, car density on roads will decline. Furthermore, management should invest in energy efficient engines. To elucidate this, these days, lots of products are available in market which can consume energy. Executives should buy this and make use of it so that commuters can still take benefit of safety and comfortness of cars. To illustrate this, electronic cars can br feasible alternative for petroleum for Eco friendly nature. To conclude, this essay explained not only the idea to give up cars for one day, but also some different steps that can be taken instead of this. In my opinion, the program to not to use cars for particular day is good to deal wilt air pollution but, government need to take other remedies such as car price increase and advancements of car engines for betterment.
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preserveing
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enviroment
, there
are divided
opinions. Here few
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people
raise voice that there should be complete
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car
free days to
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reduce
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air
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pollution
.
However
, others believe that, there are
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several steps to maintain it. This essay will discuss both the sides and my perception in the ensuing paragraphs.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why there is a common belief that a
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car
free day can
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reduce
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air
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pollution
. The
first
and the foremost one is, there will be high usage of public transportation. To
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explain
this, if
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people
will not
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allow
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to commute
by
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car
for one day, they will
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use
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other
means of transportation such as walking, bus, train and
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many
more. By this, they will
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get
to that there are
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many
convenient facilities available to reach desired destination.
As a result
, there will be less usage of private vehicle and due to this, less number of
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air
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pollution
will generate.
For example
, in Delhi,
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government
has
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started
law of odd-even
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cars
in order to
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reduce
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air
pollution.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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many
measures that can
be taken
,
instead
of
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car
free day.
Initially
, authorities should impose higher luxury taxes on
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cars
. To be more
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clear
, nowadays,
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cars
are
easily
available in the market in affordable price.
Because of this
,
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many
human beings
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buy
it and
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use
it on regular basis.
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So
, by applying heavy taxes fewer individuals will afford
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cars
and
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conseqyently
,
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car
density on roads will decline.
Furthermore
, management should invest in energy efficient engines. To elucidate this, these days, lots of products are available in market which can consume energy. Executives should
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buy
this and
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make
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use
of it
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so
that commuters can
still
take benefit of safety and
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comfortness
of
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cars
. To illustrate this, electronic
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cars
can
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br
feasible alternative for petroleum for Eco friendly nature.

To conclude
, this essay
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explained
not
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the
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to give up
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cars
for one day,
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also
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some
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steps that can
be taken
instead
of this. In my opinion, the program
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to not to
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use
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cars
for particular day is
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good
to deal wilt
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air
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pollution
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but
,
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government
need to take
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other
remedies such as
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car
price increase and advancements of
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car
engines for betterment.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think an international car free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways do to this. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
378 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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