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Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications. v. 2
Owing to the rapidly growing trend of negative news being highlighted more often nowadays, it has been suggested that media ought to focus on presenting more of positive news in their broadcasting forms. In my opinion, I completely affirm with this notion as this will spread positivity as well as instill a sence of progression and security amongst the denizens. To begin with, displaying a content based out of good news will promote optimism and help people to lead an efficacious life. In other words, when people would see news which mainly focuses on positive happenings, they would not only feel happy but also would complete their work and duties effectively. Moreover, this positivity will result in more peace and harmony in society. For example, the news of construction of Statue of Unity in India has made an impression in the individuals’ mindset to be more enthusiatic and have a nonviolent approach towards life. Clearly, such broadcastings should be done on a regular basis to inculcate unity and positive attitude between humans globally. Additionally, media emphasising on positive news also grabs the attention of people on latest developments as well as faciliates them to feel secure. For instance, media broadcastings such as highlighting signing peace treaties among nations as well as adding armoury strength to the national forces make masses to feel proud and assured. Furthermore, with the news of technological advancements as well as new regulations, it has been seen that there has a ben significant drop in the crime rate, which not only makes the country safer but also attractes the foreign tourists to visit the nation. Undoubtedly, by spreading such positive wibes internationally will boost the overall economy and promote the tourist destinations of the nation. To conclude, evidently it is vital for media companies to spread good news as this will spread optimism and a sense of reliability globally, which will bring deluge of benefits to the individual nations as well as society as a whole. Therefore, I strongly believe that media should prioritize focusing on content based on positive information.
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growing trend of
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negative
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news
being highlighted
more
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often
nowadays, it has
been suggested
that
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media
ought to focus on presenting more of
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positive
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news
in their broadcasting forms. In my opinion, I completely affirm with this notion as this will spread positivity as
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well
as instill a
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sence
of progression and security amongst the denizens.

To
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begin
with, displaying a content based out of
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good
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news
will promote optimism and
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help
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people
to lead an efficacious life.
In other words
, when
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people
would
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see
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news
which
mainly
focuses on
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positive
happenings, they would not
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only
feel happy
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but
also
would complete their work and duties
effectively
.
Moreover
, this positivity will result in more peace and harmony in society.
For example
, the
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news
of construction of Statue of Unity in India has made an impression in the individuals’ mindset to be more
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enthusiatic
and have a nonviolent approach towards life.
Clearly
, such
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broadcastings
should
be done
on a regular basis to inculcate unity and
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positive
attitude between humans globally.

Additionally
,
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media
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emphasising
on
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positive
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news
also
grabs the attention of
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people
on latest developments as
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well
as
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faciliates
them to feel secure.
For instance
,
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media
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broadcastings
such as highlighting signing peace treaties
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among
nations as
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well
as adding
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armoury
strength to the national forces
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make
masses to feel proud and assured.
Furthermore
, with the
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news
of technological advancements as
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well
as
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new
regulations, it has been
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seen
that there has a
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ben
significant drop in the crime rate, which not
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only
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makes
the country safer
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but
also
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attractes
the foreign tourists to visit the nation.
Undoubtedly
, by spreading such
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positive
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wibes
internationally
will boost the
overall
economy and promote the tourist destinations of the nation.

To conclude
,
evidently
it is vital for
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media
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companies
to spread
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good
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news
as this will spread optimism and a sense of reliability globally, which will bring deluge of benefits to the individual nations as
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well
as society as a whole.
Therefore
, I
strongly
believe that
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media
should prioritize focusing on content based on
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positive
information.
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25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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