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Some people think a high taxes is necessary because it allows government have enough for public services Others disagree Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people think a high taxes is necessary because it allows government have enough for public services Others disagree 1
An easy admission process in foreign universities and a plenty of benefits associated with it make people encourage to send their children to study in abroad. In fact, this trend is becoming popular day by day. However, there are some critics, who think that, it has several disadvantages, which can not be overlooked. I totally agree with this view and the reasons of my inclination are explained in trailed paragraphs. To begin with, studying in other countries make children more capable to compete in the global market, which is mandatory for everyone to succeed in this fast-paced life. Additionally, foreign education broadens the horizons of knowledge of students, which definitely plays a vital role to enhance one's job prospects. On the other hand, foreigners can earn the handsome revenue by heavily charging the international students. Therefore, they also pave the way for overseas students to come and study in their nations. Despite an enormous number of benefits, this culture is not acceptable by some detractors. They believe that, sending children to the foreign land may ruin their local culture and traditions, as after studying in abroad, students need to accept the host country's culture. Moreover, with the increasing number of attacks on international students makes some parents uncomfortable to send their children in foreign lands. For example, a recent survey has shown that, there is twenty percent of the increase in the international students in the US and Australia. To conclude, although, it has several drawbacks, I firmly believe that, people should send their children to abroad for study for the betterment of them.
An easy admission process in
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foreign
universities and a
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plenty
of benefits associated with it
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make
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people
encourage to
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send
their
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children
to study in abroad. In fact, this trend is becoming popular day by day.
However
, there are
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some
critics, who
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think
that, it has several disadvantages, which can not
be overlooked
. I
totally
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agree
with this view and the reasons of my inclination are
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explained
in trailed paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, studying in other countries
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make
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children
more capable to compete in the global market, which is mandatory for everyone to succeed in this
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fast
-paced life.
Additionally
,
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foreign
education broadens the horizons of knowledge of
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students
, which definitely plays a vital role to enhance one's job prospects.
On the other hand
, foreigners can earn the handsome revenue by
heavily
charging the international
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students
.
Therefore
, they
also
pave the way for overseas
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students
to
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come
and study in their nations.

Despite an enormous number of benefits, this culture is not acceptable by
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some
detractors. They believe that, sending
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children
to the
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foreign
land may ruin their local culture and traditions, as after studying in abroad,
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students
need to accept the host country's culture.
Moreover
, with the increasing number of attacks on international
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students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
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some
parents uncomfortable to
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send
their
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children
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
lands.
For example
, a recent survey has shown that, there is twenty percent of the increase in the international
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students
in the US and Australia.

To conclude
, although, it has several drawbacks, I
firmly
believe that,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
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send
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to abroad for study for the betterment of them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think a high taxes is necessary because it allows government have enough for public services Others disagree 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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