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Some people they that interview is the best method in recruiting staff but others say there are better ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people they that interview is the best method in recruiting staff but others say there are better ways. v. 1
Nowadays, there is an increase in trend of distance learning. Several people believe that this method has a total of positive impacts and it will alter conventional education while others say that argue that it is impossible to eliminate brick and mortal classroom. This essay will discuss both opinions. To begin with, there are some advantages in attending virtual classroom. First and foremost, learning via internet is time-consuming for both students and schools. For example, students can learn anything and anywhere provided that they have computer connecting the internet. In terms of teachers, they can deliver a lesson to all classes by video instead of teaching the same things again and again. Secondly, online education saves costs for the country. For instance, schools can reduce over heat costs or decline budget for investing in facilities since expanded campus is not necessary. In addition, e-learning provides opportunities for people who live far from the university. The fact shows that many residents in remote rural areas still have chances to achieve degree thanks to this advanced technology. On the other hands, face - to - face learning plays an integral part in education. Firstly, interactive learning is more effective than online learning. In detailed, when discussing about one topic, teachers can give some feedback for students to make sure that they understand all their mistakes and improve these errors. Moreover, studying under supervision motivates students to learn hard. Due to the fact that there are a huge number of students who are lazy and not self-awareness is learning, it is essential for them to have tutors who control students' studies and help them have good academic results. In conclusion, although there is a bunch of positive influences which online learning brings, I strongly believe that traditional education is a good teaching method which is irreplaceable. It not only helps students have more interaction with classmates, but also provide them an environment to improve skills and learn new things together.
Nowadays, there is an increase in trend of distance
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learning
. Several
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people
believe that this method has a total of
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positive
impacts and it will alter conventional
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education
while others say that argue that it is impossible to eliminate brick and mortal classroom. This essay will discuss both opinions.

To
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begin
with, there are
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some
advantages in attending virtual classroom.
First
and foremost,
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learning
via internet is time-consuming for both
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students
and schools.
For example
,
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students
can learn anything and anywhere provided that they have computer connecting the internet. In terms of teachers, they can deliver a lesson to all classes by video
instead
of teaching the same things again and again.
Secondly
, online
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education
saves costs for the country.
For instance
, schools can
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reduce
over heat costs or decline budget for investing in facilities since expanded campus is not necessary.
In addition
, e-learning provides opportunities for
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people
who
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live
far from the university. The fact
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shows
that
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many
residents in remote rural areas
still
have chances to achieve degree thanks to this advanced technology.

On the other hands, face
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to
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-
face
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learning
plays an integral part in
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education
.
Firstly
, interactive
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learning
is more effective than online
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learning
. In detailed, when
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discussing about one
topic, teachers can give
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some
feedback for
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students
to
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make
sure that they understand all their mistakes and
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improve
these errors.
Moreover
, studying under supervision motivates
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students
to learn
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hard
. Due to the fact that there are a huge number of
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students
who are lazy and not self-awareness is
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learning
, it is essential for them to have tutors who control students' studies and
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help
them have
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good
academic results.

In conclusion
, although there is a bunch of
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positive
influences which online
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learning
brings, I
strongly
believe that traditional
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education
is a
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good
teaching method which is irreplaceable. It not
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only
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helps
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students
have more interaction with classmates,
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but
also
provide them an environment to
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improve
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skills
and learn new things together.
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IELTS essay Some people they that interview is the best method in recruiting staff but others say there are better ways. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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