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Some people support development of agriculture like, factory farming and scientific creation of fruits and vegetables. While other oppose. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people support development of agriculture like, factory farming and scientific creation of fruits and vegetables. While other oppose. v. 1
With the rise in modernization, a man has transformed his life tremendously. He has progressed from Walking barefooted in the jungles to take the first step on the moon. Nevertheless, there are some issues which remains are irrevocable and as complex as ever. For instance the given topic asserts that development of agriculture; is it beneficial the production of crops through scientific method or not? Through this essay, I shall explore the dimensions of this topic with examples and illustration shape up my opinion by the end. On one side, there is a group of people Who believe that development of farming and scientific way is the better way to production of vegetables and fruits. They strengthen their view point by claiming that, firstly, in the modern scenario, the cuisines were manufactured used to chemical for growing. secondly, in the previous time farmers used to in- organic composition and soil fertility is rich than nowadays. Especially, they have no fulfilled requirement of people without organic farming. whereas, last but not leats, population is grown up day-by-day so that is reason farmer affection towards growing crops for scientific way so, it is the best way to fulfill demand of individuals. The best epitome of this is India has been developed of farming through artificial technique. It helps to production of food and incline the economy of nation. Contrary to this, there is an opposing group of people who believe that the scientific method is not best way for growing crops. first, it is true, because that way surge up numerous disease for mankind. The factory farming have incline a growth of economy and business. They were used to harmful pesticides for germinate crops. In the contemporary era, secondly, the women and men suffer from Stone, kidney failure diseases. It is bad impact on the health of human beings. Finally, the fertility of soil was loss day by day by using pesticides on the land. The best epitome of this is China was consumed chemicals and scientific way for manufacture crops. It used to ton of plastic in the crops so, that is wrong way to incline diseases. To crown it all, I pen down saying that, weighing the both options; there is no single conclusion still; I take this ground that an effective clap require use of both hands therefore undoubtedly, it is the best way to manufactured cuisine by scientific creation for fulfill demand of people. But although, the hazardous pesticides used to higher production and gain a quite few of economy but, it is destroyed the natural environment; inclination disease, poor soil- fertility.
With the rise in modernization, a
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man
has transformed his life
tremendously
. He has progressed from Walking barefooted in the jungles to take the
first
step on the moon.
Nevertheless
, there are
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some
issues which remains are irrevocable and as complex as ever.
For instance
the
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given
topic asserts that development of agriculture; is it beneficial the
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production
of
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crops
through
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scientific
method or not? Through this essay, I shall explore the dimensions of this topic with examples and illustration shape up my opinion by the
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end
.

On one side, there is a group of
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people
Who believe that development of
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farming
and
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scientific
way is the better way to
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production
of vegetables and fruits. They strengthen their view point by claiming that,
firstly
, in the modern scenario, the cuisines
were manufactured
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used
to chemical for growing.
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secondly
, in the previous time farmers
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used
to in- organic composition and soil fertility is
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rich
than nowadays.
Especially
, they have no fulfilled requirement of
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people
without organic
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farming
.
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whereas
, last
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but
not
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leats
, population
is grown
up day-by-day
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so
that is
reason farmer affection towards growing
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crops
for
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scientific
way
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so
, it is the
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best
way to fulfill demand of individuals. The
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best
epitome of this is India has
been developed
of
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farming
through artificial technique. It
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helps
to
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production
of food and incline the economy of nation.

Contrary to this, there is an opposing group of
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people
who believe that the
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scientific
method is not
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best
way for growing
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crops
.
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first
, it is true,
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because
that way surge up numerous disease for mankind. The factory
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farming
have
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incline
a growth of economy and business. They were
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used
to harmful pesticides for germinate
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crops
. In the contemporary era,
secondly
, the women and
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men
suffer from Stone, kidney failure diseases. It is
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bad
impact on the health of human beings.
Finally
, the fertility of soil was loss
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day by day by
using pesticides on the land. The
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best
epitome of this is China
was consumed
chemicals and
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scientific
way for manufacture
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crops
. It
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used
to ton of plastic in the
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crops
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so
,
that is
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wrong
way to incline diseases.

To crown it all, I pen down saying that, weighing the both options; there is no single conclusion
still
; I take this ground that an effective clap require
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use
of both hands
therefore
undoubtedly
, it is the
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best
way to manufactured cuisine by
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scientific
creation for fulfill demand of
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people
.
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But
although, the hazardous pesticides
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used
to higher
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production
and gain a quite few of economy
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but
, it is
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destroyed
the natural environment; inclination disease, poor soil- fertility.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people support development of agriculture like, factory farming and scientific creation of fruits and vegetables. While other oppose. v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
434 words
6.0
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