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Traveling is more important than reading books in order to understand the people and the world Do you? agree or disagree with the statement Use specific reasons to support your answer. v.2

Traveling is more important than reading books in order to understand the people and the world Do you? agree or disagree with the statement Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 2
traveling is plenty of interesting things. Although get knowing myriad cultures and peoples. along traveling we waste time. Hence the book is worth more than traveling. Reading a book means to get new knowledge and improve our imagination. In my opinion, having a book is worth more than gold in the world. Firstly in the books are including details and information about the world, the people, the cultures and the history. Hence having myriad books means to have the world front of us inasmuch as not every one of us has the possibility to travel all over the world. For example, when I was a teenager must need to care for my little sister and I didn' t have a possibility to leave from my house, hence I read myriad history books. That help me to know all europian country’s history and the beautiful places. For me, the most important is reading books. Secondly, our brain works and improve more imagination while we read books. As the doctor says reading one book means healthy memory and improve skills in writing. For example, my neighborhood has limited skills in spoken and writing mother language. Hence to develop this skills he read myriad books and after a few months he eliminated most of the grueling problems in writing and spoke language process. we can not count the value of books helping a lot of people. In conclusion, I believe that reading books involves myriad knowledge to understand a renowned country and their history. Overall I think the books contribute to the personality of people and improve their skills. Including the imagination in a reading process improve understanding of the world and the people more than traveling.
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along
traveling we waste time.
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the
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book
is worth more than traveling.
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Reading
a
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book
means to
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get
new knowledge and
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improve
our imagination. In my opinion, having a
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book
is worth more than gold in the world.

Firstly
in the
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books
are including
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details
and information about the
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world
, the
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people
, the cultures and the
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history
.
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having
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myriad
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books
means to have the
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world
front of us inasmuch as not every one of us has the possibility to travel all over the
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world
.
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, when I was a
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teenager
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need to care for my
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sister and I
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books
. That
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europian
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is
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books.

Secondly
, our brain works and
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improve
more imagination while we read
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books
. As the doctor says
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reading
one
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book
means healthy memory and
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improve
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skills
in writing.
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, my neighborhood has limited
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in spoken and writing mother language.
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to develop
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this
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he read
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and after a few months he eliminated most of the grueling problems in writing and spoke language process.
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can not count the value of
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helping
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, I believe that
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reading
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books
involves
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knowledge to understand a renowned country and their
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history
.
Overall
I
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the
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books
contribute to the personality of
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people
and
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improve
their
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skills
. Including the imagination in a
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reading
process
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improve
understanding of the
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world
and the
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people
more than traveling.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Traveling is more important than reading books in order to understand the people and the world Do you? agree or disagree with the statement Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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