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the goverments spend milion of dollars in space programs. Some people think that is better to spend this money in problems closer to our home. v.2

the goverments spend milion of dollars in space programs. Some people think that is better to spend this money in problems closer to our home. v. 2
In my opinion, I totally disagree that governments spend millions of dollars each year on their space programmes, is better to spent on dealing with problem closer to home. Earth is becoming more worse than before and human' s action are not doing nothing to protect the home when we live. Additionally, why we need to focus in other plant and not pay attention to our planet. Scientists can conttribute to have special metod for better situation in the air pollution, global warming, and healthy problems. In this way, a lot of the many invest on space program will contribute solve the problems of our home. firstly, living in earth planet with hight air pollution is getting worse day by day. The future generation risk to have seriously problem with health and the number of dead person will increase immendiatly. The milion spend in research that did not have interes for whole of people, will contribute for continuos of life in our planet. For example, in my country operate a lot of bussniess in sectore of manifacturing are using the old machines and technology. This sectore maintain a lot of people at work, but my country has hight air pollution because of those company. If the goverment will invest to prevent the air pollution by changing this machines, we will have better life. in conclusion, nowdays in country like affrica dieds myriad of people because of the low income for living and they are homeless and with healthy problems. The governments can supply better life for this people instead of spending a lot of many in case that are not benefical for whole people. why not increasing the quality of life and scientists will develop metod and project for new better life here in our presiouse plant
In my opinion, I
totally
disagree that
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governments
spend millions of dollars each year on their space
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programmes
, is
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better
to spent on dealing with
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problem
closer to home. Earth is becoming
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more worse
than
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before
and
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human&
#039; s action are
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not doing nothing
to protect the home when we
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live
.
Additionally
, why we need to
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focus in
other plant and not pay attention to our planet. Scientists can
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conttribute
to have special
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metod
for
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better
situation in the
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air
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pollution
, global warming, and healthy
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problems
. In this way, a
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lot
of the
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many
invest on space program will contribute solve the
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problems
of our home.

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firstly
, living in earth planet with
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hight
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air
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pollution
is getting worse day by day. The future generation
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risk
to have
seriously
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problem
with health and the number of dead person will increase
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immendiatly
. The
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milion
spend in research that did not have
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interes
for whole of
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people
, will contribute for
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continuos
of
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life
in our planet.
For example
, in my country operate a
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lot
of
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bussniess
in
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sectore
of
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manifacturing
are using the
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old
machines and technology. This
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sectore
maintain a
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lot
of
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people
at work,
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but
my country has
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hight
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air
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pollution
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because
of those
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company
. If the
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goverment
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will invest
to
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prevent
the
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air
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pollution
by changing this machines, we will have
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better
life.

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in
conclusion,
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nowdays
in country like
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affrica
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dieds
myriad of
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people
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because
of the low income for
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living and
they are homeless and with healthy
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problems
. The
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governments
can supply
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better
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life
for this
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people
instead
of spending a
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lot
of
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many
in case that are not
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benefical
for whole
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people
.
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why
not increasing the quality of
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life
and scientists will develop
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metod
and project for new
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better
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life
here in our
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presiouse
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plant
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Mistakes

IELTS essay the goverments spend milion of dollars in space programs. Some people think that is better to spend this money in problems closer to our home. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
296 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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