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Some people suggest that there should be restrictions on a detailed description of crimes in the newspapers and on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people suggest that there should be restrictions on a detailed description of crimes in the newspapers and on television. v. 1
The violent contents broadcasted by the mass media (the television and the printing press in particular) have been singled out in recent years as a matter of urgent public concern. It has been argued that a detailed description of the crime, especially violent crime, should be restricted. I agree with this suggestion based on the following concerns. There can be little doubt that a complete description of crimes has a direct impact on viewers perception of crime, including its nature and impacts. Ongoing exposure to reports on crime scenes has desensitised viewers to the horrors of serious crimes such as homicide. Many TV programmes tend to dramatise the process of tracing criminals. So immersed are viewers in the storyline that few are encouraged to link the crime to a brutal, unsympathetic and devastating act. Meanwhile, hardly has any newspaper or TV editor carried out a follow-up study of convicted criminals. This form of representation fails to alert viewers to the fact that no criminal can stay at large and all offenders will be brought to justice. Meanwhile, the depiction of violence is potentially the primary cause of "copycat" suicides, fights, shootings and bombings. People are inclined to vent their discontent in various ways, and one of the most common is violence. The documentary on a criminal or violent act provides them with role models, those characters who initiate most of the acts of violence on television. The portrayal of those characters encourages viewers to emulate violent behaviour, believing that their acts are likely to be acknowledged. Despite its enormous effects on the audience, the description of crimes on television or newspapers should not be made a scapegoat for all social violence. It would divert people's attention from the root causes of violence. Some depictions of violence are likely to contribute to harmful effects on viewers, whereas other portrayals may be pro-social and beneficial for the audience. For example, many programmes encourage no-violent alternatives to solutions. Similarly, television and newspapers have played a significant role in educating the audience about the advantages of building a non-violence community and the inadvisability of excessive drinking, car racing, drug-using and other unlawful acts. As suggested above, media violence, including the detailed picturing of violent acts, contributes at least partly to social violence and to the audience's aggressive thoughts and behaviour. However, there is no simple cause-and-effect relationship between media violence and societal violence and both have multiple causes.
The
violent
contents broadcasted by the mass media (the
television
and the printing press
in particular
) have
been singled
out in recent years as a matter of urgent public concern. It has
been argued
that a detailed description of the
crime
,
especially
violent
crime
, should
be restricted
. I
agree
with this suggestion based on the following concerns.

There can be
little
doubt
that a complete description of
crimes
has a direct impact on
viewers
perception of
crime
, including its nature and impacts. Ongoing exposure to reports on
crime
scenes has
desensitised
viewers
to the horrors of serious
crimes
such as homicide.
Many
TV
programmes
tend to
dramatise
the process of tracing
criminals
.
So
immersed are
viewers
in the storyline that few
are encouraged
to link the
crime
to a brutal, unsympathetic and devastating
act
. Meanwhile, hardly has any newspaper or TV editor carried out a follow-up study of convicted
criminals
. This form of representation fails to alert
viewers
to the fact that no
criminal
can stay at large and all offenders will
be brought
to justice.

Meanwhile, the depiction of
violence
is
potentially
the primary cause of
"
copycat
"
suicides, fights, shootings and bombings.
People
are inclined
to vent their discontent in various ways, and one of the most common is
violence
. The documentary on a
criminal
or
violent
act
provides them with role models, those characters who initiate most of the
acts
of
violence
on
television
. The portrayal of those characters encourages
viewers
to emulate
violent
behaviour
, believing that their
acts
are likely to
be acknowledged
.

Despite its enormous effects on the audience, the description of
crimes
on
television
or newspapers should not
be made
a scapegoat for all social
violence
. It would divert
people
's attention from the root causes of
violence
.
Some
depictions of
violence
are likely to contribute to harmful effects on
viewers
, whereas other portrayals may be pro-social and beneficial for the audience.
For example
,
many
programmes
encourage no-violent alternatives to solutions.
Similarly
,
television
and newspapers have played a significant role in educating the audience about the advantages of building a non-violence community and the inadvisability of excessive drinking, car racing, drug-using and other unlawful acts.

As suggested above, media
violence
, including the detailed picturing of
violent
acts
, contributes at least partly to social
violence
and to the audience's aggressive thoughts and
behaviour
.
However
, there is no simple cause-and-effect relationship between media
violence
and societal
violence
and both have multiple causes.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people suggest that there should be restrictions on a detailed description of crimes in the newspapers and on television. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
404 words
6
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