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Some people suggest that each family should only have a car and encourage alternative vehicle. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people suggest that each family should only have a car and encourage alternative vehicle. v. 1
Some people argue that utilization of computers in educational activities will have a positive impact, while others take the view that the results of this will have negative effects. In my opinion, computers will give so many benefits to people who are involved in the educational field. On one side of the argument, there are people who hold the opinion that computers will have certain advantages. The most compelling reason for believing this is that computers can do lots of things in seconds and accurately. Computers can be used to take notes and store tones of data due to that, consumption of paper would reduce drastically. For example, the recent study conducted at the University of Alberts shows that, due to online examination, usage of papers has dropped by 90%. This is so beneficial to our environment because for less paper, less trees will cut. Despite the above arguments, there are some people still believe that in the near future, due to the usage of computer will show bad effects. The reason behind this is that due to the computers, student`s skills and interests in other sectors will reduce. Students will be lethargic in writing because computers were doing it for them and instead of reading a hard copy of the books they will read on a computer screen which is harmful for their eyes. Students may get addicted to this and they may use a computer all day instead of doing some other activities like going out with friends and playing sports. In conclusion, while both views are commonly held in society, I believe that computers are essential in education because they have plenty of advantages for everyone who is involved in this field.
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impact, while others take the view that the results of this will have
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effects. In my opinion, computers will give
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benefits to
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people
who
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in the educational field.

On one side of the argument, there are
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people
who hold the opinion that computers will have certain advantages. The most compelling reason for believing this is that computers can do lots of things in seconds and
accurately
. Computers can be
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used
to take notes and store tones of data
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due
to that, consumption of paper would
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reduce
drastically
.
For example
, the recent study conducted at the University of
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Alberts
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shows
that,
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to online examination, usage of papers has dropped by 90%. This is
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beneficial to our environment
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for less paper,
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Despite the above arguments, there are
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effects. The reason behind this is that
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skills
and interests in other sectors will
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. Students will be lethargic in writing
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because
computers were doing it for them and
instead
of reading a
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hard
copy of the books they will read on a computer screen which is harmful for their eyes. Students may
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get
addicted to
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this and
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use
a computer all day
instead
of doing
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other activities like going out with friends and playing sports.

In conclusion
, while both views are
commonly
held in society, I believe that computers are essential in education
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because
they have
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plenty
of advantages for everyone who
is involved
in this field.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people suggest that each family should only have a car and encourage alternative vehicle. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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