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Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Other moves a number of times throughout their lives. Which do you prefer? v.2

Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Other moves a number of times throughout their lives. Which do you prefer? v. 2
Lately, there has been an argument about the best way to group students in order to achieve academic excellence. While many people believe that the schools should classify students based on their intellectual capabilities, others are of the opinion that schools should allow students of varying academic performances to learn together. This essay will discuss both views and express why I believe that studying with a different group of students is beneficial. Firstly, there are a number of benefits that can be derived from having students of different academic capacity study together. One of these is that, this creates a motivational environment for the average students. A good example of this, is a student who has a low intellect, who can always refer back to the intelligent ones for better explanation of topics. It has also been proven by a recent study in France, that being in class with smart people, can make a dull student improve significantly in their studies. Furthermore, each child has a different gift. That a child has a low academic performance, does not mean he would not be talented. For instance, an academically dull student may do well in vocational studies. Hence, he can also impart this knowledge on his academically bright counterparts. Of course, this is a good advantage as we live in an era where having a certificate only, does not qualify one for employment. In contrast, those who believe that students should be taught based on academic abilities believe that doing so will lead to a fast paced learning for the highly intelligent students. For instance, they will not be dragged back in their studies by the less intelligent ones. To conclude, in my opinion, I believe having different categories of students learn together in the same classroom will pose greater benefits. Teachers should consider taking this approach.
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allow
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students
of varying
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performances to learn together. This essay will discuss both views and express why I
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believe
that studying with a
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different
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students
is beneficial.

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different
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capacity
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together. One of these is that, this creates a motivational environment for the average
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students
. A
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example of this, is a
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who has a low intellect, who can always refer back to the intelligent ones for better explanation of topics. It has
also
been proven
by a recent
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study
in France, that being in
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with smart
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improve
significantly
in their studies.

Furthermore
, each child has a
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different
gift. That a child has a low
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academic
performance, does not mean he would not
be talented
.
For instance
, an
academically
dull
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student
may do well in vocational
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studies
.
Hence
, he can
also
impart this knowledge on his
academically
bright counterparts.
Of course
, this is a
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good
advantage as we
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live
in an era where having a certificate
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only
, does not qualify one for employment.

In contrast
, those who
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believe
that
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students
should
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based on
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academic
abilities
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believe
that doing
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so
will lead to a
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fast
paced learning for the
highly
intelligent
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students
.
For instance
, they will not
be dragged
back in their
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studies
by the less intelligent ones.

To conclude
, in my opinion, I
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believe
having
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different
categories of
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students
learn together in the same classroom will pose greater benefits. Teachers should consider taking this approach.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Other moves a number of times throughout their lives. Which do you prefer? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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