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many universities now offer academic courses over the internet. However, som people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better Explain why. v.3

many universities now offer academic courses over the internet. However, som people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better Explain why. v. 3
Today, the internet has become the most important part of our lives in every field. The internet has dramatically given the best way to get some information. I completely say that it is a good thing for our present and future lives. Firstly, due to the internet, computer has changed human lives for their work and education as well. Moreover, education is also dependent on the internet. For instance, a laptop is the best thing for us with the help of the internet because in any company the work cannot be done without the laptop. The media are also becoming an important part of our lives with the help of the internet and technology. The technology also plays an indispensable role with the help of the internet. Secondly, the education is found to start online as compared to on campus so that the disabled people who cannot go to the university or college can also get education online and make their lives better. For example, mobile is called the invention of neon technology. Today, every person has a mobile because it is cheaply and easily available in the market. Because of the mobile and the internet, children can learn new things in their lives by playing education related games so their mind will develop and even skills will also improve. The internet is also becoming cheaper due to the advancement of technology. In conclusion, without the internet we cannot live our life so because in every field to get information we need the internet.
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important
part of our
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in every field. The internet has
dramatically
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given
the best way to
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get
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some
information. I completely say that it is a
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good
thing for our present and future
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lives
.

Firstly
, due to the internet, computer has
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changed
human
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lives
for their work and
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education
as well
.
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,
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education
is
also
dependent on the internet.
For instance
, a laptop is the best thing for us with the
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help
of the internet
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because
in any
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company
the work cannot
be done
without the laptop. The media are
also
becoming an
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important
part of our
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lives
with the
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help
of the internet and technology. The technology
also
plays an indispensable role with the
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help
of the internet.

Secondly
, the
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education
is found
to
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start
online as compared to on campus
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so
that the disabled
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people
who cannot go to the university or college can
also
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get
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education
online and
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make
their
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lives
better.
For example
, mobile
is called
the invention of neon technology.
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Today
, every person has a mobile
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because
it is
cheaply
and
easily
available in the market.
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Because
of the mobile and the internet, children can learn new things in their
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lives
by playing
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education
related games
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so
their mind will develop and even
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skills
will
also
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improve
. The internet is
also
becoming cheaper due to the advancement of technology.

In conclusion
, without the internet we cannot
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live
our life
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so
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because
in every field to
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get
information we need the internet.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay many universities now offer academic courses over the internet. However, som people still prefer learning in traditional classrooms. Which do you think is better Explain why. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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