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Q31: Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use v.1

Q31: Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use v. 1
It is usually said that when an unfavourable situation occurs, the best strategy would be to accept the situation and move on. However, it is also argued that instead of accepting such circumstances, one must give an effort to improve in such situations. In my opinion, I would believe that a person must fight harder and improve themselves rather than accepting a bad situation and do nothing. This essay will discuss both these aspects in coming into this conclusion. Firstly, it can be easily pointed out that without trying for improvement, a person will always stagnate and always face the same problems throughout their entire life. For example, suppose if a person is doing a job which he doesn't like and not getting paid well, he won't be able to get away with it as long as he is not trying to improve himself by giving extra effort to find a job that he loves or provide a better pay. Secondly, it is evident that only people who have tried to improve themselves, have managed to overcome these problems and able to lead a successful life. Many examples of most popular rich people had past lives which had difficult situations. However, one can argue that there may be adverse situations which are out of their control. Where such scenario occurs, there is no point of trying other than accept the situation. For instance, if a company gets bankrupt, all the employees in that company will lose their jobs despite their efforts. Even though they still do have other career options available. In conclusion, it can be seen that even though when there is a bad situation, people must try to improve in such situations to live better rather that accept and have a miserable life.
It is
usually
said that when an
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unfavourable
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situation
occurs, the best strategy would be to accept the
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situation
and
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move
on.
However
, it is
also
argued that
instead
of accepting such circumstances, one
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must
give an effort to
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improve
in such
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situations
. In my opinion, I would believe that a person
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must
fight harder and
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improve
themselves
rather
than accepting a
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bad
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situation
and do nothing. This essay will discuss both these aspects in coming into this conclusion.

Firstly
, it can be
easily
pointed out that without trying for improvement, a person will always stagnate and always face the same problems throughout their entire life.
For example
, suppose if a person is doing a job which he doesn't like and not getting paid well, he won't be able to
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get
away with it as long as he is not trying to
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improve
himself by giving extra effort to find a job that he
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loves
or provide a better pay.

Secondly
, it is evident that
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only
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people
who have tried to
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improve
themselves, have managed to overcome these problems and able to lead a successful life.
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Many
examples of most popular rich
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people
had past
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lives
which had difficult situations.

However
, one can argue that there may be adverse
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situations
which are out of their control. Where such scenario occurs, there is no point of trying other than accept the
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situation
.
For instance
, if a
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company
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gets
bankrupt, all the employees in that
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company
will lose their jobs despite their efforts.
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Even though
they
still
do have other career options available.

In conclusion
, it can be
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seen
that
even though
when there is a
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bad
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situation
,
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people
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must
try to
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improve
in such
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situations
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
better
rather
that accept and have a miserable life.
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IELTS essay Q31: Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
295 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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