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Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Other moves a number of times throughout their lives. Which do you prefer? v.5

Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Other moves a number of times throughout their lives. Which do you prefer? v. 5
In today' s hectic world, in which life has trials and tribulations all people around the globe looking for better life. People have different point of view about lifestyle regarding the trends of modern world. By and large it' s established beyond doubt that vast majorities of people bend over backwards to enjoy their life. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that they should spend their whole time living in one place whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. Agreement is yet to be reached on this issue; however, to the extent my personal perspective is concerned, live in different place will provide fertile ground for people to experience life vastly. In the following paragraph, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons. One compelling reason, lending credence to the stance taken above is that it goes without saying that people in all around the world confront various obstacles in their life. In order to overcome those difficulties people need some changes in their life. Scientifically speaking, vast majorities of people use different strategies to lead a better lifestyle, which will render their life more convenient. The most paramount one can be moving to different place and look forward into better chances. Indeed, not only can different places provide an opportunity for people to find a decent job but also provide people with a happy life. Delving further into the issue reveal that experience different places will provide fertile ground for myriads of people to explore life and benefits from kind of chances, which that movement bring. A noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistic revealed by recent research conducted in our country; show that crowds of people who move a number of time have been more successful in their life especially in their professional career rather than one' s who just stay in one place. Another reason that is equally important if not more is that people will get acquaintance with different kind of culture and civilization. Broadly speaking, there are vast majorities of mystery behind every culture. In fact, not only will people provide with different tradition and customs of those cultures but also will enhance their knowledge about history of heritage. To put it in other word, people in different age will be able to take advantages of those heritage and get familiar with those tradition provide an opportunity for people to adapt themselves with community. However, what I alluded to above cannot be overgeneralized to all contexts. Alongside with the innumerable benefits it has, indisputably, live in one place will definitely come with lower stress. Indeed, myriads of people like to keep in touch with their family and old friends and moving to new area will make them feel anxiety and disturb. Nevertheless, it does not make those preceding benefits pale. To wrap it up, live in one place or move to a new area will certainly have its own merits and demerits. Contemplating all the aforementioned reasons one soon realize that move a number of time will provide number of chances for people such as job opportunity in order to feel comfort. In addition, people will get familiar with different culture and civilization and are able to improve their social activities. I highly suggest that people should at least experience one time different kind of lifestyle in their entire lives.
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people
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life
.
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#039; s established beyond doubt that vast majorities of
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people
bend over backwards to enjoy their
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life
.
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Some
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people
are inclined
toward the opinion that they should spend their whole
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time
living in one
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place
whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. Agreement is
yet
to
be reached
on this issue;
however
, to the extent my personal perspective
is concerned
,
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live
in
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different
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place
will
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provide
fertile ground for
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people
to experience
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life
vastly
. In the following paragraph, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.

One compelling reason, lending credence to the stance taken above is that it goes without saying that
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people
in all around the world confront various obstacles in their
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life
. In order to overcome those difficulties
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people
need
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some
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changes
in their
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life
.
Scientifically
speaking, vast majorities of
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people
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use
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different
strategies to lead a better lifestyle, which will render their
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life
more convenient. The most paramount one can be moving to
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different
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place
and look forward into better chances.
Indeed
, not
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only
can
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different
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places
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provide
an opportunity for
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people
to find a decent job
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but
also
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provide
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people
with a happy
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life
. Delving
further
into the issue reveal that experience
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different
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places
will
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provide
fertile ground for myriads of
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people
to explore
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life
and benefits from kind of chances, which that movement
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bring
. A noteworthy
refreshingly
intelligible statistic revealed by recent research conducted in our country;
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show
that crowds of
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people
who
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move
a number of
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time
have been more successful in their
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life
especially
in their professional career
rather
than
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#039; s who
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just
stay in one place.

Another reason
that is
equally
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important
if not more is that
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people
will
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get
acquaintance with
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different
kind of
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culture
and civilization.
Broadly
speaking, there are vast majorities of mystery behind every
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culture
. In fact, not
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only
will
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people
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provide
with
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different
tradition and customs of those
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cultures
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but
also
will enhance their knowledge about history of heritage. To put it in other word,
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people
in
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different
age will be able to take advantages of
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those heritage
and
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get
familiar with
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those tradition
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provide
an opportunity for
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people
to adapt themselves with community.
However
, what I alluded to above cannot
be overgeneralized
to all contexts. Alongside with the innumerable benefits it has,
indisputably
,
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live
in one
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place
will definitely
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come
with lower
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stress
.
Indeed
, myriads of
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people
like to
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keep
in touch with their family and
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old
friends and moving to new area will
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make
them feel anxiety and disturb.
Nevertheless
, it does not
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make
those preceding benefits pale.

To wrap it up,
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live
in one
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place
or
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move
to a new area will
certainly
have its
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own
merits and demerits. Contemplating all the aforementioned reasons one
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soon
realize that
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move
a number of
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time
will
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provide
number of chances for
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people
such as job opportunity in order to feel comfort.
In addition
,
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people
will
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get
familiar with
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different
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culture
and civilization and are able to
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improve
their social activities. I
highly
suggest that
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people
should at least experience one
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time
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different
kind of lifestyle in their entire
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lives
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
67Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Other moves a number of times throughout their lives. Which do you prefer? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
552 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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