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Some people spend more time reading books, while others prefer to watch TV. The former group are more likely to develop creative imaginations and have a much better grasp of language skills. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people spend more time reading books, while others prefer to watch TV. The former group are more likely to develop creative imaginations and have a much better grasp of language skills. v. 1
Reading has never lost their unique power to attract people and transport them to a different world. Nowadays, due to the high competition in schools and workplaces, people are constantly seeking better methods to acquire knowledge and capabilities. Some people argue that reading is a better way to develop creative imaginations and practice language skills than watching TV. Personally, I totally agree this opinion. On the one hand, compared to those who watch TV, those who spend more time reading books are more likely to experience the benefits of linguistic and creative development. When people read, they need to construct the actions and expressions of the characters in the text trough imagination and creation in their mind, which, unlike the image shown on the TV to restrict their imagination space. For example, in fact, people will find that reading a novel is often more interesting than watching a movie, and they will feel and understand the same story differently each time they read it. On the other hand, reading books will contribute not only to people’s understanding of language but also their ability to use it in speech and writing. The language, grammar and logic using in books is always more accurate than the words provided from most TV programmes. For instance, those who spend more time on reading books often have a good ability of speech and writing, their expression more logical, accurate and easy understanding. In conclusion reading books allows for everyone to learn more, develop imagination and improve language skills and thus they will have more competition than those are only watching TV during studying and working.
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and transport them to a
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different
world. Nowadays, due to the high competition in schools and workplaces,
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people
are
constantly
seeking better methods to acquire knowledge and capabilities.
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Some
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argue that
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imaginations
and practice
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language
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skills
than watching TV.
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this opinion.

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watch
TV, those who spend more time
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reading
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books
are more likely to experience the benefits of linguistic and creative development. When
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people
read, they need to construct the actions and expressions of the characters in the text trough
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imagination
and creation in their mind, which, unlike the image shown on the TV to restrict their
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imagination
space.
For example
, in fact,
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people
will find that
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reading
a novel is
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often
more interesting than watching a movie, and they will feel and understand the same story
differently
each time they read it.

On the other hand
,
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reading
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books
will contribute not
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to
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people’s
understanding of
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language
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but
also
their ability to
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use
it in speech and writing. The
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language
, grammar and logic using in
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books
is always more accurate than the words provided from most TV
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programmes
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For instance
, those who spend more time on
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reading
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books
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often
have a
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good
ability of speech and writing, their expression more logical, accurate and easy understanding.

In conclusion
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reading
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books
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allows
for everyone to learn more, develop
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imagination
and
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improve
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language
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skills
and
thus
they will have more competition than those are
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only
watching TV during studying and working.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people spend more time reading books, while others prefer to watch TV. The former group are more likely to develop creative imaginations and have a much better grasp of language skills. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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