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It's been seen that reading for pleasure develops imaginations and better language skills than to watch TV. v.1

It's been seen that reading for pleasure develops imaginations and better language skills than to watch TV. v. 1
It has always been a great debate whether the pleasure reading or the watching TV improves the creativity, positive imagination power and language skill for an individual. Some people think that reading is better for enhancing positive thinking while other groups say that watching TV is more beneficial. I completely agree that the thinking capability and language skill of a person are better developed by reading than watching television. First of all, reading for pleasure grasps the attention of a person more than the TV can. Most of the people who read a lot have a better thinking capability and thus become innovative and more creative. While people do not pay utmost attention while watching TV as they often change the channels to find something more interesting. Television improves the listening and speaking skills. Reading and the analytical ability of an individual are developed more quickly by reading books. It is obvious that reading books, magazines, journals or even websites give much opportunity to learn something more accurately than watching television. In the case of pleasure reading, the reader always has the option to read whatever interests him/ her most. On the other hand, television programmes are broadcasted according to the people who maintain that. Television programs are much more commercial and always try to produce programs keeping the commercial aspects in mind. Good books are always the better alternative in learning new things, developing skills and imagination. Again, the reading and writing skill of a person cannot be greatly developed unless this person is a professional writer or reads a lot. Only watching television is not a good choice who wants to develop their language skills. Finally, good books and other reading materials come with the thoughtfulness of writers and with the historical facts and events which are much more thought-provoking than the TV programmes. People often tend to watch entertaining programs like movies than watching a historical program on the History channel. On the other hand, when people read books or other materials, they read only things that can keep their attention. A book, thus, is a better option for everyone to learn more, develop imagination and improve language skills, especially in reading and writing areas.
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language
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for an individual.
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than watching television.

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for pleasure grasps the attention of a
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more than the TV can. Most of the
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who
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a lot have a
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thinking capability and
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people
do not pay utmost attention while watching TV as they
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change
the channels to find something more interesting.

Television
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improves
the listening and speaking
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skills
.
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Reading
and the analytical ability of an individual
are developed
more
quickly
by
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reading
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books
. It is obvious that
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reading
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books
, magazines, journals or even websites give much opportunity to learn something more
accurately
than watching
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television
. In the case of pleasure
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reading
, the reader always has the option to
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read
whatever interests him/ her most. On the
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other
hand,
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television
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programmes
are broadcasted
according to the
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people
who maintain that.
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Television
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programs
are much more commercial and always try to produce
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programs
keeping the commercial aspects in mind.
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Good
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books
are always the
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alternative in learning new things, developing
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skills
and imagination.

Again, the
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and writing
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person
cannot be
greatly
developed unless this
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person
is a professional writer or
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reads
a lot.
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watching
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television
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choice who wants to develop their
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language
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skills
.

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,
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and
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materials
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come
with the thoughtfulness of writers and with the historical facts and
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events
which are much more
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-provoking than the TV
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programmes
.
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on the History channel. On the
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read
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materials, they
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only
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,
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better
option for everyone to learn more, develop imagination and
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language
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skills
,
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in
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reading
and writing areas.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay It's been seen that reading for pleasure develops imaginations and better language skills than to watch TV. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
368 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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