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It has been said that people who read for pleasure have more developed imaginations and better language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

It has been said that people who read for pleasure have more developed imaginations and better language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. v. 1
Some people think that reading for pleasure increases people’s imagination and language skills more so than watching TV does. Personally, I totally agree with this view and will analyse the reasons in the following essay. Reading for enjoyment can help people to develop their imagination and improve their language skills in many ways. Firstly, while watching television is said to be more of a passive activity, reading is considered to be an active form of learning. Reading stimulates people’s brains more as they have to use their imagination to visualise the characters and plot of the story, and this helps to further develop their imaginative thinking skills. Secondly, language skills can also be improved from reading. By reading regularly, people can expand their vocabulary and learn different grammatical structures and how to use them effectively. Watching TV, on the other hand, does little to enhance people’s imagination and language skills. While reading, people have plenty of time to read the text and visualise the content of the story. However, when watching TV, viewers use their imagination very little, as they can see the images on the screen. Furthermore, the dialogue of the story or movie is usually spoken at a fast pace, which does not give viewers much time to comprehend what is being said, let alone learning anything new. Finally, television is full of advertisements these days and therefore distracts viewers from what they are watching. This makes it even more difficult for people to absorb information that might enhance their language skills. In conclusion, I believe that reading books is a more efficient way for people to enhance their imagination and language skills, while watching TV is simply more of a source of entertainment.
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the reasons in the following essay.

Reading for enjoyment can
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the characters and plot of the story, and this
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can expand their vocabulary and learn
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the content of the story.
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usually
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pace, which does not give viewers much time to comprehend what is
being said
,
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alone learning anything new.
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, television is full of advertisements these days and
therefore
distracts viewers from what they are watching. This
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people
to absorb information that might enhance their
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language
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skills
.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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books is a more efficient way for
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people
to enhance their
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imagination
and
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language
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skills
, while watching TV is
simply
more of a source of entertainment.
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34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It has been said that people who read for pleasure have more developed imaginations and better language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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