Some people think money is the best gift to give to teenagers others disagree to this. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1
Some people think money is the best gift to give to teenagers others disagree to this. v. 1
It is often thought by some people that the best present to offer youngsters is cash, in my opinion I think there are other souvenirs such as bags, shoes and other items that can be given as rewards.
On the one hand, while some people argued that the most appropriate gift for adolescents is money and I agree this is because sometimes, the individuals involved may come from such a poverty stricken background that they truly need the currency for survival. As a result, basic needs are met and such teens are happy. To illustrate this, there was a young child in my street who needed money to pay her school fees, the church helped her with some cash every semester and now she is a graduate.
On the other hand, even though it is argued by some people that money is the most excellent gift that can be offered to teenagers, I believe that other items such as bags, shoes or beautiful dresses could be the best depending on the situation. More often than not, there is no amount of money that can be given to children from very rich background that they will appreciate but sometimes a beautiful present such as nice bags, shoes or dresses may come in handy. In addition, given money to teenagers may make them do what they are not supposed to do for instance, when given cash, a young boy can get into drugs and alcohols.
In conclusion, even though some are of the opinion that hard currency is the most suitable reward to be presented to young adults, I think other souvenirs such as nice bags and wrist watch may be preferred by some teens.
It is
often
thought
by
some
people
that the best present to offer youngsters is cash, in my opinion I
think
there are
other
souvenirs such as
bags
, shoes and
other
items that can be
given
as rewards.
On the one hand, while
some
people
argued that the most appropriate gift for adolescents is
money
and I
agree
this is
because
sometimes
, the individuals involved may
come
from such a
poverty stricken
background that they
truly
need the currency for survival.
As a result
, basic needs
are met
and such teens are happy. To illustrate this, there was a young child in my street who needed
money
to pay her school fees, the church
helped
her with
some
cash every semester and
now
she is a graduate.
On the
other
hand,
even though
it
is argued
by
some
people
that
money
is the most excellent gift that can
be offered
to
teenagers
, I believe that
other
items such as
bags
, shoes or
beautiful
dresses could be the best depending on the situation. More
often
than not, there is no amount of
money
that can be
given
to children from
very
rich background that they will appreciate
but
sometimes
a
beautiful
present such as nice
bags
, shoes or dresses may
come
in handy.
In addition
,
given
money
to
teenagers
may
make
them do what they are not supposed to do
for instance
, when
given
cash, a young boy can
get
into drugs and alcohols.
In conclusion
,
even though
some
are of the opinion that
hard
currency is the most suitable reward to
be presented
to young adults, I
think
other
souvenirs such as nice
bags
and wrist
watch
may
be preferred
by
some
teens.
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