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Some people spend a lot of money for their wedding ceremonies. However, others feel like it is unnecessary to spend a lot. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people spend a lot of money for their wedding ceremonies. However, others feel like it is unnecessary to spend a lot. v. 2
Wedding ceremonies are ceremonies which people spend different amounts of money. This essay will discuss the viewpoints of people while some of them spend a lot of money for wedding ceremonies and others feel like it is not compulsory to spend a lot. This issue can really be crucial at the time of the wedding arrangements. Couples may fight or the bride may not agree with some stuff, like decorations, with the family of the groom. In this sense, the essay will primarily discuss the reasons why people may desire to spend lots of money for their life-changing ceremony. Weddings can be a lifelong experience, which will be organized once by the bride herself. As most of the women want to be a princess, this is one of their time to feel like that truly. Moreover, they may not find a second chance to marry, so it must be understandable if they want to spend much money to make everything perfect, as they have always dreamed. However, this money can be spent more usefully. The groom and bride can agree to spend the money for decorating their house or can use it for experiencing a life-changing holiday. They may also increase the quality of their honeymoon by cutting some expenses from the wedding ceremony. At the end, the wedding ceremony will only last for 8 or 9 hours. Moreover, bride and groom cannot even have a fun at their own wedding, instead of enjoying it, they will spend their time by welcoming others and taking pictures with them. Therefore, spending money to other useful activities is more logical than spending every penny to the wedding ceremony. As the weddings are crowded and unenjoyable, it is better to save some expenses and spending them later to have fun as a new constructed family.
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people
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different
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. This essay will discuss the viewpoints of
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people
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money
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wedding
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ceremonies
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and others
feel like it is not compulsory to
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spend
a lot. This issue can
really
be crucial at the time of the
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wedding
arrangements. Couples may fight or the
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bride
may not
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agree
with
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some
stuff, like decorations, with the family of the groom. In this sense, the essay will
primarily
discuss the reasons why
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people
may desire to
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spend
lots of
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money
for their life-changing ceremony.

Weddings can be a lifelong experience, which will
be organized
once by the
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bride
herself. As most of the women want to be a princess, this is one of their time to feel like that
truly
.
Moreover
, they may not find a second chance to marry,
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so
it
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must
be understandable if they want to
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spend
much
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money
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make
everything perfect, as they have always dreamed.

However
, this
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money
can
be spent
more
usefully
. The groom and
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bride
can
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spend
the
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money
for decorating their
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house
or can
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use
it for experiencing a life-changing holiday. They may
also
increase the quality of their honeymoon by cutting
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some
expenses from the
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wedding
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ceremony
. At the
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end
, the
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wedding
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will
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only
last for 8 or 9 hours.
Moreover
,
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bride
and groom cannot even have a fun at their
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own
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wedding
,
instead
of enjoying it, they will
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spend
their time by welcoming others and taking pictures with them.

Therefore
, spending
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money
to other useful activities is more logical than spending every penny to the
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wedding
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ceremony
. As the
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weddings
are crowded
and unenjoyable, it is better to save
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some
expenses and spending them later to have fun as a new constructed family.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people spend a lot of money for their wedding ceremonies. However, others feel like it is unnecessary to spend a lot. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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