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Some people say that when deciding how taxes should be spent, governments should prioritise health care. Other people believe that there are more important priorities for taxpayers' money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people say that when deciding how taxes should be spent, governments should prioritise health care. Other people believe that there are more important priorities for taxpayers' money. v. 1
Administrations around the world have a range of financial responsibilities. Health care is an important government service that requires high levels of funding. While some members of the community feel that health care services are the top priority for government funding, others believe that governments should be prioritizing education. Health care services play a critical role in the general wellbeing of our communities. At some point in our lives, we will all require professional medical assistance. In particular, children and the elderly are the demographic groups that tend to need more access to health care facilities. Unfortunately, the young are often least able to take care of themselves. They need assistance to deal with the range of health issues that might confront them in their lives. Governments are charged with this responsibility, and must devote significant financial resources to the provision of medical services. However, providing health care for the public is an expensive undertaking, and some people contend that these funds should be devoted to other public services. One argument suggests that the health of an individual is the responsibility of that individual. People that refuse to take good care of their own health should not be given the support of a government funded health care system. The argument holds that it is better to prioritize the funding of education than to give money to people that have chosen to live unhealthy lifestyles. To conclude, the prioritizing of funding for public services is a difficult task. Both education and health care are important priorities for the administrators of all countries. Perhaps a good compromise would be more government funding for public education on health care issues.
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is an
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government
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service
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funding
. While
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some
members of the community feel that
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health
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care
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are the top priority for
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government
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funding
, others believe that
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governments
should be prioritizing education.

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care
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services
play a critical role in the general
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wellbeing
of our communities. At
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some
point in our
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lives
, we will all require professional medical assistance.
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, children and the elderly are the demographic groups that tend to need more access to
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health
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care
facilities. Unfortunately, the young are
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often
least able to take
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care
of themselves. They need assistance to deal with the range of
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health
issues that might confront them in their
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lives
.
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are charged
with this responsibility, and
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must
devote significant financial resources to the provision of medical services.

However
, providing
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for the
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public
is an expensive undertaking, and
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some
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people
contend that these funds should
be devoted
to other
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public
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services
. One argument suggests that the
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of an individual is the responsibility of that individual.
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that refuse to take
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good
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of their
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own
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should not be
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given
the support of a
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funded
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system. The argument holds that it is better to prioritize the
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funding
of education than to give money to
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people
that have chosen to
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live
unhealthy lifestyles.

To conclude
, the prioritizing of
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funding
for
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public
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services
is a difficult task. Both education and
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health
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care
are
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important
priorities for the administrators of all countries. Perhaps a
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good
compromise would be more
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government
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funding
for
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education on
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health
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care
issues.
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IELTS essay Some people say that when deciding how taxes should be spent, governments should prioritise health care. Other people believe that there are more important priorities for taxpayers' money. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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