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Some people say that traveling abroad is the way to really learn about another country. However, other people say that it is not necessary to travel as we can find enough information about other countries on the TV or through the internet. Discuss both vi v.2

Some people say that traveling abroad is the way to really learn about another country. However, other people say that it is not necessary to travel as we can find enough information about other countries on the TV or through the internet. 2
There is a growing debate on the abroad travel option to get a real view of the other side of the world. One thought of the school suggests that one can learn about another country on the social media. Another view is traveling aboard is the best way to know more detailed information about different countries. Personally, I believe that the overseas travel is a good choice to get better inside of another country over solely rely on other alternatives. Due to globalization, with growing curiosity to learn more about the culture, customs and rituals of another country, people are frequently browsing the internet or watching global TV channels. Such sources provide in-depth information including lifestyle, accepted behavior, things that not appreciated in the form of documentary including someone' s personal experience in that country. These details are enough to understand and visualize what kind of life people might be living in the country. In other words, from information provided in multiple ways, people make their own perspectives and opinions which need not be the real one. On the other side, people who say that overseas trip is the great way to grasp the real facts of another country argue that there is plenty of opportunities to interact with foreigners and learn from observing their body language. Even though we read things theoretically, we learn more things by interacting with others. Interaction with others helps to learn practical things of life. Again, implementing the things learned from the internet into the daily routine helps us to reveal unknown concepts belonging to a new environment. Overall, it is solely possible to discover things to a great extent when we travel abroad by communicating with people. In conclusion, in my opinion, the best way to learn real aspects of another country is to travel to that country as information floating on the other media do not provide adequate knowledge about that country.
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option to
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get
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real
view of the
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other
side of the world. One
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thought
of the school suggests that one can
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learn
about another
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country
on the social media. Another view is traveling aboard is the best way to know more detailed
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information
about
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different
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countries
.
Personally
, I believe that the overseas
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travel
is a
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good
choice to
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get
better
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inside of
another
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country
over
solely
rely on
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other
alternatives.

Due to globalization, with growing curiosity to
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learn
more about the culture, customs and rituals of another
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country
,
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people
are
frequently
browsing the internet or watching global TV channels. Such sources provide in-depth
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information
including lifestyle,
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accepted
behavior, things that not appreciated in the form of documentary including
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country
. These
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details
are
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enough
to understand and visualize what kind of life
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people
might be living in the
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country
. In
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other
words, from
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information
provided in multiple ways,
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people
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make
their
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own
perspectives and opinions which need not be the
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real
one.

On the
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other
side,
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people
who say that overseas trip is the great way to grasp the
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real
facts of another
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country
argue that there is
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plenty
of opportunities to interact with foreigners and
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learn
from observing their body language.
Even though
we read things
theoretically
, we
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learn
more things by interacting with others. Interaction with others
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helps
to
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learn
practical things of life. Again, implementing the things learned from the internet into the daily routine
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helps
us to reveal unknown concepts belonging to a new environment.
Overall
, it is
solely
possible to discover things to a great extent when we
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travel
abroad by communicating with
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people
.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, the best way to
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learn
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real
aspects of another
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country
is to
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travel
to that
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country
as
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information
floating on the
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other
media do not provide adequate knowledge about that
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country
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that traveling abroad is the way to really learn about another country. However, other people say that it is not necessary to travel as we can find enough information about other countries on the TV or through the internet. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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