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Some people say that travel helps us to appreciate other cultures. How true is this statement? Do you think that people who travel a lot appreciate other cultures more than those who stay at home? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant exam v.3

Some people say that travel helps us to appreciate other cultures. How true is this statement? Do you think that people who travel a lot appreciate other cultures more than those who stay at home? 3
Nowadays, the development of transportations makes tourism be easy for everybody. Travel is a way to relax on a vacation. They are attracted to explore new places and try to find something difference from the places where they stay. People who travel many times can experience another culture. They can directly see beautiful views and feel it. This makes them know about how beautiful of it. For example, they will climb a mountain to have fresh air or nice views on high. Moreover, people go to villages or tribes to learn more about other' s culture or traditional meals. Locals will teach them how to love nature and live close it. However, somebody who busies with their life does not have time to travel, but they can still open their knowledge of new culture with those media. Today, there are a lot of ways to get different cultures, such as the internet, radio and television. People who went to one place shared information about their experience on social. Those help them appreciate each other' s culture. In my opinion, there are the different experience with people who travel around the world or just stay at home. On the other hand, I believe that they will have the same feeling about other culture.
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travel
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beautiful
views and feel it. This
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them know about how
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beautiful
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culture
or traditional meals. Locals will teach them how to
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nature and
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close it.

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busies with their life does not have time to
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,
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culture
with those media.
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cultures
, such as the internet, radio and television.
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People
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who
went to one place shared information about their experience on social. Those
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help
them appreciate each
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around the world or
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stay at home. On the
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hand, I believe that they will have the same feeling about
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IELTS essay Some people say that travel helps us to appreciate other cultures. How true is this statement? Do you think that people who travel a lot appreciate other cultures more than those who stay at home? 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
212 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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