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Some people say that travel helps us to appreciate other cultures. How true is this statement? Do you think that people who travel a lot appreciate other cultures more than those who stay at home? v.1

Some people say that travel helps us to appreciate other cultures. How true is this statement? Do you think that people who travel a lot appreciate other cultures more than those who stay at home? v. 1
Thanks to the globalization and the development of transport, travel is getting more popular. It is claimed that travel improved the appreciation of other cultures. In my opinion, enthusiastic travellers can understand the values of cultures better than those at home for some certain reasons. It is true that travel helps people appreciate other traditions and customs. This is because when tourists stay with the locals, experience their lifestyles or participate in traditional festivals by themselves, they can make friends, fall in line with the locals and show greater respect to these customs. Moreover, when travelling visitors have opportunities to be directly told the history, origin and other intersting stories of traditions by inhabitans whom have lived there for many years. Last but not least, travellers can try special food which every local area has different recipes. This is a key factor in appreciating distinct cultures. However, some people believe that they can appreciate cultures through computer or phone screens. This is not completely true because they don’t have a chance of experiencing other customs directly and don’t understand the true values of local customs. And clearly travellers have more practical experiences than those who just stay at home and watch or read information on the Internet. In addition, not every culture is found on the Internet. In fact, there are some tribes living separate from the rest of the world like some tribes in Amazon which people don’t even know their existence. In conclusion, travel really helps people to appreciate other cultures. And personally, travel is better than just staying at home to understand the values of other cultures.
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is getting more popular. It
is claimed
that
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travel
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improved
the appreciation of
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other
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cultures
. In my opinion, enthusiastic
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can understand the values of
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cultures
better than those at home for
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some
certain reasons.

It is true that
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travel
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helps
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people
appreciate
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other
traditions and customs. This is
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because
when tourists stay with the
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locals
, experience their lifestyles or participate in traditional festivals by themselves, they can
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make
friends, fall in line with the
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locals
and
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show
greater respect to these customs.
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, when travelling visitors have opportunities to be
directly
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told
the history, origin and
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other
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intersting
stories of traditions by
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inhabitans
whom have
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lived
there for
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years. Last
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not least,
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travellers
can try special food which every
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local
area has
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different
recipes. This is a key factor in appreciating distinct cultures.

However
,
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some
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people
believe that they can appreciate
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cultures
through computer or phone screens. This is not completely true
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because
they don’t have a chance of experiencing
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other
customs
directly
and don’t understand the true values of
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local
customs. And
clearly
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travellers
have more practical experiences than those who
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just
stay at home and
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watch
or read information on the Internet.
In addition
, not every
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culture
is found
on the Internet. In fact, there are
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some
tribes living separate from the rest of the world like
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some
tribes
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in Amazon
which
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don’t even know their existence.

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conclusion,
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really
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helps
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people
to appreciate
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other
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cultures
. And
personally
,
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travel
is better than
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just
staying at home to understand the values of
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other
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cultures
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that travel helps us to appreciate other cultures. How true is this statement? Do you think that people who travel a lot appreciate other cultures more than those who stay at home? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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