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New English Exam Currently, all entering freshman take level 1 English first and then level 2. Starting in the fall term, freshman will be required to take an English entrance exam to determine which level they should be placed in. Those with a high enoug v.1

New English Exam Currently, all entering freshman take level 1 English first and then level 2. Starting in the fall term, freshman will be required to take an English entrance exam to determine which level they should be placed in. Those with a high enoug v. 1
Education is one of the most useful things that one should have because lack of knowledge can result in negative outcome and a large group of people think that teachers play an important role to achieve the peak of educational goal, while others believe that it relies on student mindset. I partially agree with both the statements and I would like to discuss about the set of views in the following paragraphs. Firstly, a good teacher makes a student perfect and worked as a supporting role. As we all know, nobody born with prior knowledge and skills, however, their future goal has been already set by the God and to follow that path everyone needs a caretaker and teachers are the curators of our activity. Because, they will not only guide us, but also help us in the nourishment of mental health, which will directly produce positive outgrowth. For example, when I was in first standard, I was afraid of mathematics, however, my teacher guided me and informed me about the importance of the calculations in our growth, which helped me to become a good data scientist after completion of my graduation. Hence, we can't deny the importance of any teacher in terms gaining the main aim of our soul. Secondly, a positive attitude makes a man perfect as well as good for own development. If, you do not have a positive attitude towards your work and target, then it would be very difficult for everyone to succeed in activity. As well as, mindset and personality makes you different and it will generate an oneself confidence, which will not only help you to work harder, but as well as an increase in encouragement. For instance, one of my neighbour Anuj was used to calling himself as a failure due to lack of interest and patience, but after taking consultancy from his father, he became the topper of his school and now he has become the CEO of KYRION TECHNOLOGY a computer based company located in India. Thus, desire and attitude are important part of our heart. In conclusion, the teachers and incentive are an important part of our growth. In my opinion, I will say we should respect pair equally, firstly, teachers for making us such an important aspect of any nation and secondly, self approach for keeping the hope alive.
Education is one of the most useful things that one should have
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because
lack of knowledge can result in
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negative
outcome and a large group of
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people
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think
that
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teachers
play an
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important
role to achieve the peak of educational goal, while others believe that it relies on student mindset. I
partially
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agree
with both the statements and I would like to
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discuss about the
set of views in the following paragraphs.

Firstly
, a
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good
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teacher
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makes
a student perfect and worked as a supporting role. As we all know, nobody born with prior knowledge and
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skills
,
however
, their future goal has been already set by the God and to follow that path everyone needs a caretaker and
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teachers
are the curators of our activity.
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Because
, they will not
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only
guide us,
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but
also
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help
us in the nourishment of mental health, which will
directly
produce
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positive
outgrowth.
For example
, when I was in
first
standard, I was afraid of mathematics,
however
, my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teacher
guided me and informed me about the importance of the calculations in our growth, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
me to become a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
data scientist after completion of my graduation.
Hence
, we can't deny the importance of any
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teacher
in terms gaining the main aim of our soul.

Secondly
, a
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positive
attitude
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makes
a
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man
perfect
as well
as
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good
for
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own
development. If, you do not have a
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positive
attitude towards your work and target, then it would be
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very
difficult for everyone to succeed in activity.
As well
as, mindset and personality
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makes
you
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different
and it will generate
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an oneself
confidence, which will not
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only
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help
you to work harder,
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but
as well
as an increase in encouragement.
For instance
, one of my
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neighbour
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Anuj
was
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used
to calling himself as a failure due to lack of interest and patience,
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but
after taking consultancy from his father, he became the
Use "(topper)" if you mean to express an extreme with this adjective.
topper
of his school and
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now
he has become the CEO of
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KYRION
TECHNOLOGY a computer based
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company
located in India.
Thus
, desire and attitude are
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important
part of our heart.

In conclusion
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
and incentive are an
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important
part of our growth. In my opinion, I will say we should respect pair
equally
,
firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
for making us such an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
important
aspect of any nation and
secondly
, self approach for keeping the hope alive.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay New English Exam Currently, all entering freshman take level 1 English first and then level 2. Starting in the fall term, freshman will be required to take an English entrance exam to determine which level they should be placed in. Those with a high enoug v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
391 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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