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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your o v.36

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. 36
There is an ongoing controversy over whether to use a foreign language for study or work aboard is the only purpose for studying it. Somebody don’t think that there is the objective other than to use it in other country. However, in my opinion, I believe that learning new language can be caused by several reasons such as entertainment and part time job. First, some people like to spend their time on the entertainments from other countries, such as computer games from and movies from Japan or India, but it will be more fun, if they understand the language used in those media. Because some of computer games and movies have no translated versions, learning the new language is needed for someone who want to make their leisure time more fun. For example, my friend, who obsesses with movies so much, want to fully comprehend his favorite Japanese movie, so that he study Japanese by himself from the internet. Now he can use Japanese well, and translate Japanese movie for others as a hobby, making him so happy that he can do what he likes for others. Second, a foreign language can use as a part time job that create more income for people. Nowadays, technology make it easy to create money from anywhere in the world and being a translator or a language teacher online takes not much time. Mobile application named “iTalki”, the platform that connects languages teacher with someone to need to learn them, is an example of this career. There are massive of languages available there, and tons of teachers, who can teach from even their bedroom. Clearly, learning language can create a job, even though that one doesn’t live aboard. In conclusion, there are many reasons to study new languages as described and I am strongly convinced that using those languages aboard is the only reason of knowing them.
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only
purpose for studying it. Somebody
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it in
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country.
However
, in my opinion, I believe that learning new
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language
can
be caused
by several reasons such as entertainment and part
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time
job.

First
,
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people
like to spend their
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time
on the entertainments from
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other
countries, such as computer games from and
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movies
from Japan or India,
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but
it will be more fun, if they understand the
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language
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used
in those media.
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games and
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movies
have no translated versions, learning the new
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language
is needed
for someone who want to
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make
their leisure
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time
more fun.
For example
, my friend, who obsesses with
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movies
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so
much, want to
fully
comprehend his favorite Japanese
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movie
,
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so
that he study Japanese by himself from the internet.
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Now
he can
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use
Japanese well, and translate Japanese
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movie
for others as a hobby, making him
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so
happy that he can do what he likes for others.

Second, a foreign
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language
can
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use
as a part
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time
job that create more income for
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people
. Nowadays, technology
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make
it easy to create money from anywhere in the world and being a translator or a
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language
teacher online takes not much
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time
. Mobile application named “
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iTalki
”, the platform that connects
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languages
teacher with someone to need to learn them, is an example of this career. There are massive of
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languages
available there, and tons of teachers, who can teach from even their bedroom.
Clearly
, learning
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language
can create a job,
even though
that one doesn’t
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live
aboard.

In conclusion
, there are
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reasons to study new
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languages
as
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described and
I am
strongly
convinced that using those
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languages
aboard is the
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only
reason of knowing them.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. 36

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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