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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 3
Learning a foreign language is now a common practice and considered as of utmost importance. While some people suppose that new languages can only serve traveling and working purposes, I strongly believe those are not the only motivation for learners. On the one hand, I can understand the viewpoint that a large number of learners only study languages to meet their communications demand while traveling or working in another country. Knowing the local language could be a powerful tool to get to know the culture and customs of a nation, which allows immigrants to adapt to the community faster and start their work with higher efficiency. Their life and career paths, therefore, are also brighter. However, I believe a language can operate more functions than the only two mentioned. Scientists proved that the process of memorizing new vocabulary and grammars have positive impacts on one’s brain. Bilinguals, therefore, are supposed to have certain skills that others cannot. Moreover, the uses of a language are not restricted in its country of origin only. As technology advanced at a rapid pace, people who know foreign languages can access to a wider range of documents and videos of different fields compared to those who only speak one. For example, when searching for information about global warming, I managed to see the problems and solutions from diverse perspectives as many relevant organizations have publications in English. I could not have had that many insights if I carried out in Vietnamese. In conclusion, I believe being able to travel and work in a foreign country is one of the main reasons why people learn a language but it is not the only one. Knowing a language can benefit learns in various aspects and people should learn a language even if they do not travel or work overseas.
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learners
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languages
to
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meet
their communications demand while traveling or working in another country. Knowing the local
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language
could be a powerful tool to
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get
to know the culture and customs of a nation, which
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allows
immigrants to adapt to the community faster and
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start
their work with higher efficiency. Their life and career paths,
therefore
, are
also
brighter.

However
, I believe a
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language
can operate more functions than the
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only
two mentioned. Scientists proved that the process of memorizing new vocabulary and grammars have
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positive
impacts on one’s brain. Bilinguals,
therefore
,
are supposed
to have certain
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skills
that others cannot.
Moreover
, the
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uses
of a
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language
are not restricted in its country of origin
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only
. As technology advanced at a rapid pace,
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people
who know foreign
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languages
can access to a wider range of documents and videos of
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different
fields compared to those who
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only
speak one.
For example
, when searching for information about global warming, I managed to
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see
the problems and solutions from diverse perspectives as
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many
relevant organizations have publications in English. I could not have had that
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many
insights if I carried out in Vietnamese.

In conclusion
, I believe being able to travel and work in a foreign country is one of the main reasons why
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people
learn a
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language
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but
it is not the
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only
one. Knowing a
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language
can benefit learns in various aspects and
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people
should learn a
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language
even if they do not travel or work overseas.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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