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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. v.25

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 25
With the globalisation, our modern society highly evaluates people who speak foreign languages. However, although I admit that bilingual people have more chance to work and travel to foreign countries, I do not believe that it is the only advantage for people to learn a foreign language. To begin with, knowing a foreign tongue allows people to find a better job abroad and to enjoy travelling globally. In fact, there are a lot of students who newly graduated from universities and have difficulties to work locally where they were born and grown up. Being able to speak a foreign tongue, thus, can give people more opportunities to look for a job in other countries. Furthermore, thanks to the cheap flight companies, we can now travel abroad easier than ever before, that means going abroad is no longer limited geographically, but more likely to be psychologically. However, language skills also help us learn professional skills. Science, for instance, is more and more developing in daily basis and usually the academic papers on the study are published in English, so that more people can read and educate themselves. Likewise, many people today tend to study in foreign countries for further and better education that they cannot have in their own countries. Having a foreign language skill, hence, basically means that people can learn more in the countries that the subjects are well studied. To sum up, while some people believe that learning languages is good when they work and travel abroad, I believe that people learn a foreign language to educate themselves on the professional subjects they mainly major in.
With the
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globalisation
, our modern society
highly
evaluates
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people
who speak
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foreign
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languages
.
However
, although I admit that bilingual
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people
have more chance to work and travel to
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foreign
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countries
, I do not believe that it is the
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only
advantage for
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people
to
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learn
a
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foreign
language.

To
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begin
with, knowing a
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foreign
tongue
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allows
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people
to find a better job
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abroad
and to enjoy travelling globally. In fact, there are
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a lot of
students who
newly
graduated from universities and have difficulties to work
locally
where they
were born
and grown up. Being able to speak a
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foreign
tongue,
thus
, can give
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people
more opportunities to look for a job in other
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countries
.
Furthermore
, thanks to the
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cheap
flight
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companies
, we can
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now
travel
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abroad
easier than ever
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before
, that means going
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abroad
is no longer limited
geographically
,
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but
more likely to be
psychologically
.

However
,
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language
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skills
also
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help
us
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learn
professional
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skills
. Science,
for instance
, is more and more developing in daily basis and
usually
the academic papers on the study
are published
in English,
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so
that more
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people
can read and educate themselves.
Likewise
,
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many
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people
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today
tend to study in
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foreign
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countries
for
further
and better education that they cannot have in their
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own
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countries
. Having a
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foreign
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language
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skill
,
hence
,
basically
means that
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people
can
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learn
more in the
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countries
that the subjects are well studied.

To sum up, while
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some
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people
believe that learning
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languages
is
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good
when they work and travel
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abroad
, I believe that
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people
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learn
a
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foreign
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language
to educate themselves on the professional subjects they
mainly
major in.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
We should learn languages because language is the only thing worth knowing even poorly.
Kató Lomb

IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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