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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that there are not the only reasons why someone should learn foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.19

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that there are not the only reasons why someone should learn foreign language. v. 19
The language learning plays an important role in our education. However, people have different views about the purpose of learning a foreign language. Some people think that travelling or working is the only reason for learning a foreign language. For example, a good communication skill is crucial during travelling. Travellers plan their itinerary by coordinating with local people such as hotel reservation. Also, people can have a better understanding of local traditions and customs if they have learned their language. Consequently, they can adapt to the local culture and lifestyle. Furthermore, people can increase their employability and receive a better offer during the overseas job application. For instance, most of job vacancies at oversea require high level proficiency of the local language in order to communicate with local residents. However, others believe that sightseeing or employment is not the only motivation to develop a skill of foreign language. People can access more information or latest news aside from their own language. For example, if people are competent to read newspapers or magazine in other languages, they can gain knowledge from experts in the world and expand their horizons. Also, it is fun and enjoyment of watching foreign films without subtitles or listen to songs in a foreign language. In addition, a foreign language often consists of culture and history. People can enrich their culture and understand the historical events by learning a foreign language. In my opinion, I believe that learning a foreign language is not the only reason for travel or work, but it is the part of understanding a history and culture of different people.
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plan their itinerary by coordinating with
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local
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people
such as hotel reservation.
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people
can have a better understanding of
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local
traditions and customs if they have learned their
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language
.
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local
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culture
and lifestyle.
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people
can increase their employability and receive a better offer during the overseas job application.
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vacancies at oversea require high level proficiency of the
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.
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language
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languages
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Also
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foreign
films without subtitles or listen to songs in a
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foreign
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language
.
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language
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culture
and understand the historical
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foreign
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IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that there are not the only reasons why someone should learn foreign language. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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