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Some governments say how many children a family can have in their country. This may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. Do you agree or disagree? give reasons for your answer v.1

Some governments say how many children a family can have in their country. This may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. 1
The amount of children that a family can have is controlled in some countries through taxes. This situation could be that the older people increase in some nations but also this may help to control the population. However, I don’t agree with the government try to say how many children this institution should have, because I believe that the reality that the state want to establish could have horrible consequences for the society. The reason for I have disagreed with this is since I see is that the psychological illness could grow, due to if a couple have one child this would do that the pressure in that person be quite huge. Also their personality will be difficult, for the reason that their parents will try to give everything, so this individual is likely being selfish and individualistic. For example, in China the authority controlled for several years the family group, and this made that in this country would exist many depressions. So, that situation only gives a lot of diseases. On the other hand, I think that the government tries to control the population because some nations such as India or China is impossible make that the resources get to everyone. Then, the best way to drive the natural sources is through of a law for control the biths. For instance, in China this policy work, due to population could decrease. So, this way could be a good way of government in some countries. To conclude, exist the trend that the some governments say the amount of a couple can have. This policy has made that the illness increase in these countries, however it has helped to the economy. Nevertheless, in my opinion, I think that for the better psychology health is, every person is free to decide how many children they want to have.
The amount of children that a family can have
is controlled
in
some
countries through taxes. This situation could be that the older
people
increase in
some
nations
but
also
this may
help
to control the population.
However
, I don’t
agree
with the
government
try to say how
many
children this institution should have,
because
I believe that the reality that the state want to establish could have horrible consequences for the society.

The reason for I have disagreed with this is since I
see
is that the psychological illness could grow, due to if a couple have one child this would do that the pressure in that person be quite huge.
Also
their personality will be difficult, for the reason that their parents will try to give everything,
so
this individual is likely being selfish and individualistic.
For example
, in China the authority controlled for several years the family group, and this made that in this country would exist
many
depressions.
So, that
situation
only
gives
a lot of
diseases.

On the other hand
, I
think
that the
government
tries to control the population
because
some
nations such as India or China is impossible
make
that the resources
get
to everyone. Then, the best way to drive the natural sources is through of a law for control the
biths
.
For instance
, in China this policy work, due to population could decrease.
So
, this way could be a
good
way of
government
in
some
countries.

To conclude
, exist the trend that the
some
governments
say the amount of a couple can have. This policy has made that the illness increase in these countries,
however
it has
helped
to the economy.
Nevertheless
, in my opinion, I
think
that for the better psychology health is, every person is free to decide how
many
children they want to have.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some governments say how many children a family can have in their country. This may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.5
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