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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. • comics • books • radio • television • film • theatre v.7

Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. • comics • books • radio • television • film • theatre v. 7
Over time we have a lot of advanced technology and information is passed all corners of the world with no time. The media which are used to transfer the data has been abundantly increased, whereas it was not same in the past years there are only limited resources to transfer or receive the instruction. In the recent years, the channel for word to pass has many ways like radio, Television, film, books and lot more. I believe, among all the media, TV, films and comics, plays a vital role in spreading the message faster than any other. Even though there are many other ways to communicate does not influence the people much distance to be wasted nowadays people are not showing up much interest in reading books rather they are opting for TV, films, comics as we know there are two sides for a coin everything has its pros and cons. Mostly, people follow films very often. Films creates a lot of impact on people because of its narration and visual effects. If the film has a very good content and if it provokes the people's mind, definitely it lasts forever. When it comes to the television, almost one of the single parent and many other categories of an watch TV and if there would be any shows or series with some moral content it will turn the entire society in the right path. In the same way a human attracts to negative faster than the positive if there would be any show or series with wrong data and which passes wrong messages there might be a chance of leading the society into negative path. As per my opinion, good and bad are not perfectly defined, before taking a step think wisely and take a move.
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time we
have
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a lot of
advanced technology and information
is passed
all corners of the world with no time. The media which are
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used
to transfer the data has been
abundantly
increased, whereas it was not same in the past years there are
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only
limited resources to transfer or receive the instruction.

In the recent years, the channel for word to pass has
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many
ways like radio, Television, film, books and lot more. I believe, among all the media, TV, films and comics, plays a vital role in spreading the message faster than any other.
Even though
there are
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many
other ways to communicate does not influence the
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people
much distance to
be wasted
nowadays
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people
are not showing up much interest in reading books
rather
they are opting for TV, films, comics as we know there are two sides for a coin everything has its pros and cons.

Mostly
,
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people
follow films
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very
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often
.
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Films creates
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a lot of
impact on
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people
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because
of its narration and visual effects. If the film has a
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very
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good
content and if it provokes the
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people
's mind, definitely it lasts forever.

When it
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comes
to the television, almost one of the single parent and
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many
other categories of
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an
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watch
TV and if there would be any
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shows
or series with
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some
moral content it will turn the entire society in the right path.

In the same way
a human attracts to
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negative
faster than the
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positive
if there would be any
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show
or series with
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wrong
data and which passes
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wrong
messages there might be a chance of leading the society into
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negative
path.

As per my opinion,
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good
and
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bad
are not
perfectly
defined,
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before
taking a step
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think
wisely
and take a
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move
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. • comics • books • radio • television • film • theatre v. 7

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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