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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v.17

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 17
The process of learning a language is a long and arduous one, and the question of why people might inflict such torment on themselves is worth discussing. While some feel this pursuit is solely a practical one, allowing us to travel or live abroad, others see it as something more. One the one hand, there are those that see language as a functional thing. These people see the process of learning as a necessary evil rather than an end in itself. One example might be school children, toiling away at their books, who do not see any point in the language until they finally go on a school trip, at which point it all seems worthwhile. In contrast, we have the other group: people who, when they embark on the journey of language learning, take it upon themselves to live and breathe the language. These people immerse themselves in the culture. Whether from home or while abroad, they listen to music, access websites and even read books in the target language. For them the journey is as important as the goal. To people like this the process of learning the language has been a life enriching experience, even if they never set foot on foreign soil. In conclusion, although for some learning a language will forever be connected to the aim of visiting or working in another country, for others it has clear benefits right here at home. I certainly belong to the latter group, as what I have gained from the experience of learning English goes far beyond simple tourism or employment.
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people
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it as something more.

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language
as a functional thing. These
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people
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see
the process of
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learning
as a necessary evil
rather
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end
in itself. One example might be school children, toiling away at their books, who do not
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see
any point in the
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language
until they
finally
go on a school trip, at which point it all seems worthwhile.

In contrast
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people
who, when they embark on the journey of
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language
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learning
, take it upon themselves to
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live
and breathe the
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language
. These
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people
immerse themselves in the culture. Whether from home or while abroad, they listen to music, access websites and even read books in the target
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language
. For them the journey is as
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important
as the goal. To
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people
like this the process of
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learning
the
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language
has been a life enriching experience, even if they never set foot on foreign soil.

In conclusion
, although for
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some
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learning
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language
will forever
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to the aim of visiting or working in another country, for others it has
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clear
benefits right here at home. I
certainly
belong to the latter group, as what I have gained from the experience of
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English goes far beyond simple tourism or employment.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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