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If a product is sold and people buy it, then advertising is not necessary and can be considered a kind of entertainment. Do you agree or disagree with this? v.6

These days sell a product to the public is not easy due to the competition there are countless of products in the market which look like similar. In my opinion, Advertisements companies play vital role here by adds. To begin with, for my product i need advertisement companies to sell the product to the society. Advertisements companies play an important role between my product and the public with the help of the advertisement i can explain to the public about benfits of my product and in the market competition is very significant, there is ample of similarities between my product and other side of the companies. Further more, so i use advertisemnt as a middle person to sell my product. For example, survey conducted by CNBC almost 70 percent of the companies spend 30 percent of their profits for advertisements. As a result, advertisements is not a entertainment but it look like that but if we understand the background of the idea we get to know whole concept of advertisement. Furthermore, some other people point of view advertisement is entertainment. The reason is, advertisement companies use movie stars for different products to make more famous of the product. Thats why some people says advertisement is a entertainment but i think because of movie stars trust of the product is increased. For instance, advertisements comapnies pays plethora amount of money to movies stars and they also keep their name and fame if anything wrong happen automatically movie star brand also Will distroy. Thus, advertising is needed to every product without the advertisement tough to sell and trust also. In conclusion, advertisements is needed for every company to sell their product. I think with help of advertisement only i can increase my sales and trust at a time.
These days
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sell
a
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product
to the public is not easy due to the competition there are countless of
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products
in the market which look like similar. In my opinion,
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Advertisements
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companies
play vital role here by
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adds
.

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begin
with, for my
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product
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i
need
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advertisement
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companies
to
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sell
the
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product
to the society.
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Advertisements
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companies
play an
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important
role between my
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product
and the public with the
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help
of the
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advertisement
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i
can
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explain
to the public about
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benfits
of my
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product
and in the market competition is
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very
significant, there is ample of similarities between my
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product
and other side of the
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companies
.
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,
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so
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i
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use
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advertisemnt
as a middle person to
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sell
my
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product
.
For example
, survey conducted by CNBC almost 70 percent of the
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companies
spend 30 percent of their profits for advertisements.

As a result
,
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advertisements
is not
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a
entertainment
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but
it
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look
like that
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but
if we understand the background of the
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idea
we
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get
to know whole concept of advertisement.

Furthermore
,
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some
other
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people
point of view
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advertisement
is entertainment. The reason is,
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advertisement
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companies
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use
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movie
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stars
for
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different
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products
to
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make
more
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famous
of the
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product
.
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Thats
why
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some
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people
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says
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advertisement
is
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a
entertainment
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but
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i
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think
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because
of
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movie
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stars
trust of the
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product
is increased
.
For instance
,
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advertisements
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comapnies
pays plethora amount of money to
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movies
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stars and
they
also
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keep
their name and fame if anything
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wrong
happen
automatically
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movie
star brand
also
Will
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distroy
.
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, advertising
is needed
to every
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product
without the
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advertisement
tough to
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sell
and trust
also
.

In conclusion
,
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advertisements
is needed
for every
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company
to
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sell
their
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product
. I
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think
with
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help
of
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advertisement
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only
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i
can increase my sales and trust at a time.
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IELTS essay If you sell a product and people buy it, then advertising it is not necessary and considered as a kind of entertainment.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
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