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Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. v. 3
It is an undenibale fact that gender equality is supported by many people and ladies and gentelmen are deemed equal in every field of life, while, others believe that men and women are not equal and for that reason, there can be several appropriate jobs for woman. As I am feminist, in my estimate, women's and men's rights are equal. However, they have some mental as well as physical differences between them. That's why there are certain jobs which are not suitable for ladies or men To begin with, Men are much stronger in comprasion with women and some jobs demand physical strength. according to the survey conducted by London University women are not favoured for some occuptions such as; engineer, master, or plumber. In addition to this, some researchers has indicated that if women do some work that requires physical activities they can damage their health. Secondly, some proffesions are related to psychology. According to some famous scientists' opinions, women are better to control their emotion compared to males. They are also more successful to understand or analyze people and have a gopd memory. In other words, females are more appropriate some proffesions such as; teachers, socialwork, examiner, interviewer. Men are not more favoured for these occuptions. In conclusion taking all discussed factors into consideration I would have to acknowledge that male and female are equal in general. Yet they have some differences And they should be choosed not because of their sex but because of their abilities Both ot them are able to become succesfull in certain fields which are suitable
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undenibale
fact that gender equality
is supported
by
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many
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people
and ladies and
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gentelmen
are deemed
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equal
in every field of life, while, others believe that
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men
and
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women
are not
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equal
and for that reason, there can be several appropriate jobs for woman. As I am feminist, in my estimate, women's and
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men
's rights are
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equal
.
However
, they have
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some
mental
as well
as physical differences between them. That's why there are certain jobs which are not suitable for ladies or
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men


To
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begin
with,
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are much stronger in
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comprasion
with
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women
and
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some
jobs demand physical strength.
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according
to the survey conducted by London University
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women
are not
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favoured
for
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some
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occuptions
such as; engineer, master, or plumber.
In addition
to this,
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some
researchers has indicated that if
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women
do
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some
work that requires physical activities they can damage their health.

Secondly
,
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some
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proffesions
are related
to psychology. According to
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some
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famous
scientists' opinions,
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women
are better to control their emotion compared to males. They are
also
more successful to understand or analyze
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people
and have a
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gopd
memory.
In other words
, females are more appropriate
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some
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proffesions
such as; teachers,
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socialwork
, examiner, interviewer.
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are not more
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favoured
for these
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occuptions
.

In conclusion
taking all discussed factors into consideration I would
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have to
acknowledge that male and female are
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equal
in general
.
Yet
they have
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some
differences And they should be
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choosed
not
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because
of their sex
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but
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because
of their abilities
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Both ot
them are able to become
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succesfull
in certain fields which are
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suitable
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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