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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your own oppinion. v.14

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 14
Few people feel that learning foreign languages will only be helpful for people who want to work or study in abroad. While others believe that there are other benefits by studying non-native languages, I would agree with the latter view. On the one hand, Learning foreigners language will be helpful for individuals who have an idea to socialize and settle in foreign countries. This is because, when a person moves to another country, he may face problems with the different sections of people without learning the local language. For instance, If any person works in a restaurant from another motherland, he might face language issues with the people. Also, It will be difficult searching for jobs. For Example, A survey conducted by the IIT Madras states that more than 60% of people will face problems with language when they migrate to another nation. As a result, It will be essential to learn non-local languages who have ideas to work and study in other motherlands. On the other hand, Learning non-native languages will help the individual in many ways. Studying foreign languages will improve the different skills of the person. To illustrate, it will enhance the individual's analytical thinking. I addition, It will also stabilize the human memory. For instance, A survey conducted by the Oxford university tells that a person knowing multiple languages will have more capability to solve complex problems. Therefore, Learning foreign languages will have many benefits which will improve the intelligence of the person. To conclude, studying foreign languages will not only helpful for the people who are willing to work and pursue in other countries, but also increase the individual problem-solving abilities and memory. Hence the people who are not ready to go abroad should also learn non-native languages for other proven benefits.
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the
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increase the individual problem-solving abilities and memory.
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who
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also
learn non-native
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46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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It is astonishing how much enjoyment one can get out of a language that one understands imperfectly.
Basil Lanneau Gildersleeve

IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 14

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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