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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v.4

Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v. 4
Few people are of the opinion that all jobs will be progressively taken over by artificially intelligent machines. In my opinion, all unskilled jobs will eventually be automated using robots. However, tasks that require emotional intelligence will continue to stay with human workforce. This essay will discuss why a few jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots rather than all jobs. All operational and repetitive tasks, which require less skills, will be done by robots in the coming years. Repetitive jobs can be easily automated because it follows a regular pattern. Moreover, these jobs require lesser human intervention for execution. For example, during the industrial revolution, machines were employed to carry out mundane tasks which were repetitive in nature. Similarly, automated teller machine is another example of a job which was replaced by a robot. In contrast, jobs that need emotional touch can only be executed by humans. Robots work on logical programming, but emotional decisions are taken based on many situational inputs that cannot be programmed. Psychaitrist, for instance, is a career that needs to work closely with the patient to understand the emotional state of the patient. Even though the symptoms shown by patients with same mental disease might be similar, the treatments differ from patient to patient. To sum up, eventually robots will be used to help us with all menial jobs; however sophisticated jobs that require human intervention will be done by humans. Ultimately, a few human jobs will be considered for robotic automation. Majority of the tasks done by humans will stay with humans.
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are of the opinion that all
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jobs
will be
progressively
taken over by
artificially
intelligent machines. In my opinion, all unskilled
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jobs
will
eventually
be automated
using robots.
However
,
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tasks
that
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require
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emotional
intelligence will continue to stay with
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human
workforce. This essay will discuss why a few
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jobs
will
be done
by
artificially
intelligent robots
rather
than all jobs.

All operational and repetitive
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tasks
, which
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require
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less
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skills
, will
be done
by robots in the coming years. Repetitive
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jobs
can be
easily
automated
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because
it follows a regular pattern.
Moreover
, these
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jobs
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require
lesser
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human
intervention for execution.
For example
, during the industrial revolution, machines
were employed
to carry out mundane
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tasks
which were repetitive in nature.
Similarly
, automated teller machine is another example of a
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job
which
was replaced
by a robot.

In contrast
,
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jobs
that need
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emotional
touch can
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humans
. Robots work on logical programming,
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but
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emotional
decisions
are taken
based on
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many
situational inputs that cannot
be programmed
.
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Psychaitrist
,
for instance
, is a career that needs to work
closely
with the
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patient
to understand the
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emotional
state of the
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patient
.
Even though
the symptoms shown by
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patients
with same mental disease might be similar, the treatments differ from
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patient
to patient.

To sum up,
eventually
robots will be
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used
to
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help
us with all menial
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jobs
;
however
sophisticated
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jobs
that
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require
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human
intervention will
be done
by
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humans
.
Ultimately
, a few
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human
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jobs
will
be considered
for robotic automation. Majority of the
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tasks
done by
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humans
will stay with
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humans
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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