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Should we invent a new language for people from different countries to use for the international communication? Do you think there are more benefits or more problems with it? Explain. v.2

Should we invent a new language for people from different countries to use for the international communication? Do you think there are more benefits or more problems with it? Explain. v. 2
Some people suggest that a new language should be invented in order to overcome the communication problems between different regions and cultures in the world. While this idea may have some useful point of views, I believe it would raise a number of worrying issues. It is obvious that a new common language would remove language barriers, so that there will be more opportunities for each individual to study, work or travel all around the world. As a result, the standards of livings will be higher so that improve the country’s economic status. In addition, if people from different areas use the same language, it would be more easy and available to expand the amount of information and knowledge via books, magazines, news and so on. On the other hand, developing a new language requires financial support of the government and a lot of time. For instance, language experts need time and money to study and develop certain aspects of a new language, such as grammar or vocabulary. Even if the language is developed, this innovation would increase expenditure on publishing and teaching, expecially in populous and developing countries as China or India. Furthermore, English is recognized as a global language that is popular and widely accepted all over the world. Therefore, to encourage using such a popular language that we have already had is more effective and cost-efficient than innovating a new one. In conclusion, I strongly argue that it is unnecessary to create a new language for international communication purpose because the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
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regions and cultures in the world. While this
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may have
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useful point of views, I believe it would raise a number of worrying issues.

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common
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language
would remove
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language
barriers,
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that there will be more opportunities for each individual to study, work or travel all around the world.
As a result
, the standards of livings will be higher
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so
that
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improve
the country’s economic status.
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, if
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people
from
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different
areas
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the same
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language
, it would be more easy and available to expand the amount of information and knowledge via books, magazines,
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news
and
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on.

On the other hand
, developing a
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new
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language
requires financial support of the
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government
and
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a lot of
time.
For instance
,
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language
experts need time and money to study and develop certain aspects of a
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language
, such as grammar or vocabulary. Even if the
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language
is developed
, this innovation would increase expenditure on publishing and teaching,
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expecially
in populous and
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developing countries
as China or India.
Furthermore
, English
is recognized
as a global
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language
that is
popular and
widely
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accepted
all over the world.
Therefore
, to encourage using such a popular
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language
that we have already had is more effective and cost-efficient than innovating a
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new
one.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
argue that it is unnecessary to create a
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new
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language
for international communication purpose
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because
the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Should we invent a new language for people from different countries to use for the international communication? Do you think there are more benefits or more problems with it? Explain. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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