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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 1
Although it is commonly said among certain individuals that the prime aim of learning international language is for work or better still to travel. Others, however, belief that the purpose for learning it goes beyond these two reasons. This essay will discuss both sides and also state my view. Firstly, due to the advent of technology and also the century where we live, we cannot afford to remain in our home country without visiting other countries. People that take up a job or travel to other nations need to learn their language so as to Foster good relation and to make their lives easy. For example, the majority of Hausa people in Nigeria do not understand any other language expect Hausa. In order for foreigners lives to be easy, learning their language will be additional benefit. This will result in smooth trade, good negotiation skills and conservation of money for the visitors. In addition to the above reasons, people also master other languages for diplomacy. I could remember in 2013 when one of the Kings in Arabic nation visited Nigeria, the government looked for a Nigerian that was skillful in Arabic language for interpretation from English to Arabic language. This has resulted in smooth communication and understanding between the two leaders. Moreover, inter-racial marriage is one of the reasons why people have knowledge of another language. For example, if you are interested in a lady that is not from your race, you have to learn her language. For instance, it is now a commonplace for Nigerians to marry from United States. As a result of this(marriage), they have to understand their language. In conclusion, while some people learn a language to earn a living or to travel and others for entirely different purpose. On balance, I believe the sole aim of learning an international language should be individualised rather than generalised.
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commonly
said among certain individuals that the prime aim of
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learning
international
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language
is for work or better
still
to travel. Others,
however
, belief that the purpose for
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learning
it goes beyond these two reasons. This essay will discuss both sides and
also
state my view.

Firstly
, due to the advent of technology and
also
the century where we
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live
, we cannot afford to remain in our home country without visiting
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other
countries.
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People
that take up a job or travel to
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other
nations need to learn their
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language
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so as to
Foster
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good
relation and to
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make
their
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lives
easy.
For example
, the majority of Hausa
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people
in Nigeria do not understand any
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other
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language
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expect
Hausa. In order for foreigners
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lives
to be easy,
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learning
their
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language
will be additional benefit. This will result in smooth trade,
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good
negotiation
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skills
and conservation of money for the visitors.

In addition
to the above reasons,
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people
also
master
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other
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languages
for diplomacy. I could remember in 2013 when one of the Kings in Arabic nation visited Nigeria, the
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government
looked for a Nigerian that was skillful in Arabic
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language
for interpretation from English to Arabic
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language
. This has resulted in smooth communication and understanding between the two leaders.
Moreover
, inter-racial marriage is one of the reasons why
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people
have knowledge of another
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language
.
For example
, if you
are interested
in a lady
that is
not from your race, you
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have to
learn her
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language
.
For instance
, it is
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now
a commonplace for Nigerians to marry
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from United States
.
As a result
of this(marriage), they
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have to
understand their language.

In conclusion
, while
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some
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people
learn a
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language
to earn a living or to travel
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and others
for
entirely
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different
purpose. On balance, I believe the sole aim of
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learning
an international
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language
should be
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individualised
rather
than
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generalised
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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