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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in that country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in that country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 3
There is a division in certain quarters about why foreign languages are learned. While some people think that the sole purpose is for visiting and working abroad, others believe that there are more reasons for it such as appreciating international art. Although I strongly believe that there is more to studying other languages, both sides of the argument will be discussed. Due to globalisation, businesses have expanded tremendously beyond national borders. This has prompted people from various parts of the world to travel, live and work in other regions. Therefore, leading to a ripple effect of people learning various languages apart from their mother tongue. For instance, a recent survey carried out by Harvard University proves that over fifty percent of people, who registered for international language classes, did so in order to work in other countries. This supports the fact that travelling and working overseas is a major reason why individuals become multilingual. However, the belief that the aforementioned point is the only cause for embracing other languages is nothing short of preposterous. The world, which is now a global village (as stated earlier) has also opened the door to the appreciation of non-native music and literature. For this reason, a considerable amount of people have resorted to enthusiastically learning other languages. For example, it was reported by a French journal that as a result of the strong interest in Shakespearian novels, there has been a rise in the number of French students, who enrolled in English classes in the city of Paris, France within the last two years. To conclude, although certain people think that immigration and working in other societies is the only reason why foreign languages are learnt, it does not change the fact that this reasoning is flawed. The information age has given more cause to learn other languages in order to benefit from other schools of thought without the need to travel or work overseas.
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some
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people
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think
that the sole purpose is for visiting and working abroad, others believe that there are more
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reasons
for it such as appreciating international art. Although I
strongly
believe that there is more to studying
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other
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languages
, both sides of the argument will
be discussed
.

Due to
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globalisation
, businesses have expanded
tremendously
beyond national borders. This has prompted
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people
from various parts of the world to travel,
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live
and work in
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other
regions.
Therefore
, leading to a ripple effect of
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people
learning various
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languages
apart from their mother tongue.
For instance
, a recent survey carried out by Harvard University proves that over fifty percent of
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people
, who registered for international
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language
classes, did
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so
in order to work in
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other
countries. This supports the fact that travelling and working overseas is a major
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reason
why individuals become multilingual.

However
, the belief that the aforementioned point is the
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only
cause for embracing
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other
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languages
is nothing short of preposterous. The world, which is
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now
a global village (as stated earlier) has
also
opened the door to the appreciation of non-native music and literature. For this
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reason
, a considerable amount of
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people
have resorted to
enthusiastically
learning
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other
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languages
.
For example
, it
was reported
by a French journal that
as a result
of the strong interest in
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Shakespearian
novels, there has been a rise in the number of French students, who enrolled in English classes in the city of Paris, France within the last two years.

To conclude
, although certain
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people
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think
that immigration and working in
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other
societies is the
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only
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reason
why foreign
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languages
are
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learnt
, it does not
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change
the fact that this reasoning
is flawed
. The information age has
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given
more cause to learn
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other
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languages
in order to benefit from
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other
schools of
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thought
without the need to travel or work overseas.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in that country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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