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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel o or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel o or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 2
Studying a new language is thought to be needed just to travel and get a job abroad. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that there are other aspects of learning a foreign language that can be advantageous for people all around the world. In this essay I will discuss both views. Being able to speak, read, write and listen to other language is mandatory to work abroad. Is, in addition, a requirement to apply for the job. For instance, a physician on call has to definitely know how to communicate with patients and nurses to be understood correctly and prevent fatal errors. In regards to travelling overseas, it is essential to understand what you see, not only signs in the streets, but also menus at restaurants for example. Express what you need and understand what it is being told to you can be amazingly fulfilling as a tourist. In spite language is key to travel and work abroad, these are not the only reasons someone would want to learn a foreign language. Even without leaving your country, a huge amount of updated information, guidelines, articles and newspapers are written in a different language, therefore, to keep up with the advances and evolution in many professions it is essential to study languages. Furthermore, it has been proved that learning new skills, such as languages at any age can exercise different parts of the brain achieving more neuronal connections and hence, more intelligence. In conclusion, whereas the two main reasons to learn a foreign language are working and visiting abroad, I believe it is also needed to keep up-to-date at work and it is truly important to our brain`s health. Thus, languages should be taught in every university and in job offices as well as part of the regular program to improve people's skills and brain function.
Studying a new
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language
is
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thought
to
be needed
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just
to travel and
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get
a job
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abroad
. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that there are other aspects of learning a foreign
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language
that can be advantageous for
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people
all around the world. In this essay I will discuss both views.

Being able to speak, read, write and listen to other
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language
is mandatory to work
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abroad
. Is,
in addition
, a requirement to apply for the job.
For instance
, a physician on call
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has to
definitely know how to communicate with patients and nurses to
be understood
correctly
and
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prevent
fatal errors.
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
In regards to
travelling overseas, it is essential to understand what you
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see
, not
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only
signs in the streets,
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but
also
menus at restaurants
for example
. Express what you need and understand what it is being
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told
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to you
can be
amazingly
fulfilling as a tourist.

In spite
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language
is key to travel and work
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abroad
, these are not the
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only
reasons someone would want to learn a foreign
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language
. Even without leaving your country, a huge amount of updated information, guidelines, articles and newspapers
are written
in a
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different
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language
,
therefore
, to
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keep
up with the advances and evolution in
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many
professions it is essential to study
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languages
.
Furthermore
, it has
been proved
that learning new
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skills
, such as
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languages
at any age can exercise
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different
parts of the brain achieving more neuronal connections and
hence
, more intelligence.

In conclusion
, whereas the two main reasons to learn a foreign
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language
are working and visiting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abroad
, I believe it is
also
needed to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up-to-date at work and it is
truly
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important
to our
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brain`s
health.
Thus
,
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languages
should
be taught
in every university and in job offices
as well
as part of the regular program to
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improve
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people
's
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skills
and brain function.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel o or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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