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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language in in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language in in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 1
These days, a lot of people say that becoming a multilingual is only beneficial if you want to work or study in a foreign country, but others believe that there are more reasons to learn a new language. I agree with the second statement, and will discuss both view points. Learning a language is crucial if people want to study or work in other countries. If people want to get a job at a company or study in a university, which is located in a different part of the world, they must learn the primary language of that business or school. Without it, their chances of getting a job or an admission are close to zero. Therefore, companies, such as the British Council and IDP were created to test peoples knowledge of English, and those who pass get permission to live, work, and study in the English speaking countries. In addition, Learning a new language can help us maintain a world peace. In today's world, there are a lot of cultural misunderstandings happing in every part of the world, which sometimes lead to not only racist remarks but also a war. By grasping a new tongue, people will understand each other on a new level, which could, potentially, stop all the wars. For instance, western countries used to make fun of Indians for their beliefs; however, after learning their language, they understood why they had such assumptions. In conclusion, I disagree that learning languages benefit only our personal and professional lives. I believe, as discussed in the 3rd paragraph, it has the power to make the world a better place to live in.
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say that becoming
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a multilingual
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beneficial if you want to work or
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study
in a foreign country,
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others believe that there are more reasons to learn a
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new
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language
. I
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agree
with the second statement, and will discuss both view points.

Learning a
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language
is crucial if
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people
want to
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study
or work in other countries. If
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people
want to
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get
a job at a
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company
or
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study
in a university, which
is located
in a
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different
part of the
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world
, they
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must
learn the primary
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language
of that business or school. Without it, their chances of getting a job or an admission are close to zero.
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,
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companies
, such as the British Council and IDP
were created
to
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test
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peoples
knowledge of English, and those who pass
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get
permission to
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live
, work, and
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study
in the
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English speaking
countries.

In addition
, Learning a
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new
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language
can
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help
us maintain a
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world
peace. In
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today
's
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world
, there are
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a lot of
cultural misunderstandings
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in every part of the
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world
, which
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lead to not
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racist remarks
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also
a war. By grasping a
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new
tongue,
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people
will understand each other on a
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new
level, which could,
potentially
,
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stop
all the wars.
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, western countries
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used
to
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make
fun of Indians for their beliefs;
however
, after learning their
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language
, they understood why they had such assumptions.

In conclusion
, I disagree that learning
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languages
benefit
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only
our personal and professional
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lives
. I believe, as discussed in the 3rd paragraph, it has the power to
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make
the
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world
a better place to
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live
in.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language in in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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